They're watching me piss. They watched me wake up, they watched me take a bath, and now they're watching me piss. The end
A contest entry
- 23 words. by asthray.heart.
146 points, ended December 26, 2007, 20 entries
Silver trophy winner
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Thanks for the unexpected comments, and the second place. It was interesting to write a 'story' 23 words long, and I'm glad that peeps enjoyed it.
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It's 23 words...the counter messes up on anything under 100. It did the same with almost all the other entries. That wouldbe so wierd to be watched during daily activities like this...
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Paranoia's always fun. But using "the end" like that seems odd to me. It sort of seems to imply that something really ends with the pissing that's being monitored. Maybe 'they' will stop watching when the pissing's done? Or maybe the narrator is doomed to spend the rest of eternity pissing, and watched? I don't know. I hope I managed to communicate what I mean.
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LOL!! Very different from wat I have so far gotten. Wonder whose watching.
Tnks for entering and goodluck.
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Interesting. Very wierd, but interesting. Good luck in this contest here. God Bless!
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