[ This pain ]

This pain
It isn't new
But it is
Stronger
It stabs my heart
Over and over.1

My breathe is short
I feel like I could die
At any moment,
Why can't I be strong
Why cant I say
The things I intended to.2

Your words
They cut right through
Your actions
There killing me
Your killing me
Slowly
Painfully.3

With you
Depression is all I know
Sad is all I ever was.4

I close my eyes
And I see me
I'm on the floor
Dying from your pain
Knifes cutting through my soft flesh,
I'm going to be stronger
I'm going to stand up
The knifes i'm going to pull out
One by one
Painfully
So I will never forget you
And what you did
So i'll always remember
The moments I actually felt happy.5

I'm sorry if i'm hurting you
But if only you could feel
My heart is aching for you.6

Now,
I'm up
I'm stronger
I'm not down on the ground
I'm standing
And somehow
I'm taller than you
Looking down at your pitiful face.7

You were so beautiful
Radiant
The only one I could ever love
Now
Your ugly
Revolting
Your making me sick
Just by looking at your reddened eyes.8

I'm strong now
And soon i'll be even stronger
Then you'll be sorry
You ever hurt me.9

I know this was hard
On you and me
But you never noticed me.10

Sometimes
Goodbye is the only way

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  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    January 28, 2008

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    This is such an amazing poem! Wow this sounds exactly like how I feel for someone to. Your words are incredibly powerful and thought provoking. The way everything just flows so nicely together and all the emotions that you put into it. I loved it!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • Maninblack
    January 7, 2008

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    Wonderful stuff

    This really strikes a chord. Talk about love and hate being two sides of the same coin. This is exactly how it goes. When I read this it was as if you were talking straight to me. Excellent. I loved it.


  • Miki Koishikawa
    December 21, 2007
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    This is how I feel about my ex he is pitiful and yes I loved it


  • asthray.heart
    December 20, 2007

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    Wow this was like dark much? Very deep an powerful. Keep it up. Im here if u need me


    ~Ebb