For Tomorrow We Die

For Tomorrow We Die1

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“It’s over tomorrow,” Annie stated. The familiar, defiant grin lit her face, but the desolate way her eyes lost their focus betrayed the truth. She had already given in. Appearance was important to her, but tonight the make-up, fanatically straightened hair, and corporate casual attire had been replaced by a girl in a tank and unwashed jeans. She stood in the neglected flowerbed in her socks, leaning against the porch stairs’ railing. Her head rolled up towards the heavens, and tears glistened like the stars. Even as she cried, she sank down into the dirt and laughed, “There’s going to be one Hell of a party tonight. We should go.”4

Lyle snorted, “So we just eat, drink, and be merry, for tomorrow we die?”5

Greasy hair fell across her eyes, but she didn’t bother to brush it away. “You got a better idea?”6

He leaned back into the porch swing and stared up at the grimy ceiling boards. The grayed wood was coated in Egg White paint that had been flaking off for years. Fixing it up had been on his To Do list for about as long. Now it would never get done, seeing as it, the porch, the whole house would be demolished in the morning.7

He shrugged, “We could order a pizza.”8

A clod of dirt was lobbed into the porch towards his face.9

“It was just an idea.”10

They fell back into silence. Annie looked to the stars while he studied a silky white mess hanging in the corner of the porch’s ceiling, trying to decide if he had spiders, silkworms, or just a nasty case of cobwebs. The web sack wasn’t the prettiest sight, but he didn’t want to watch the sky anymore. Everyone had been looking at it too much lately. Some searched for sign of an alien race (or Jesus) coming to save the chosen few. The rest spent their last few days among the living trying to catch a glimpse of the meteor.11

They were all obsessed with staring their death in the face, but what else could they do? The trajectories had been charted a thousand times, and collision was always the answer. There were no valiant heroes armed with advanced technology preparing to vaporize the stupid rock. Everyone just sat, twiddling their thumbs until Doomsday.12

Lyle looked down at his hands, his thumbs in particular, and resolutely pulled them apart. He stood and asked, “Annie?” She didn’t answer, didn’t look at him when he came down the creaky stairs and joined her in the flowerbed. She had the tense look, the one with her eyebrows touching and her jaw jutted forward. It looked like she was about to kill someone, but experience had taught him that the look meant she was lost in thought. She only whipped out the butcher’s knife when some idiot made her lose her concentration.13

Without warning, she stood and dashed into the house. Before Lyle made it up the porch stairs, she was back, carrying a blue-green bottle nestled in a plastic Packers cup like it was her newborn babe. She plopped down between the wilting daffodils and gestured for him to join her. Chuckling, she asked, “We’ve got what, five hours until dawn? I don’t want to sit up waiting for the rock to hit.”14

She handed him the cup and brandished her bottle of Nyquil. “The plan is we drink, say our goodbyes, and die in our sleep.”15

He stared at his cup’s faded gold and green G and sighed, “I prefer the plan where we party like the world was ending,” but he took the Nyquil from her and poured half in the cup. He held both for a moment and weighed them in his hands before he handed her the more full of the two, keeping the bottle for himself.16

“A toast,” he declared with a sloppy grin, holding the Nyquil aloft. “To a girl I know.” He raised it to his lips.17

Annie looked at the contents of her cup before adding, “To the end of the world,” and chugging. He capped the bottle he hadn’t bothered to drink and set it on the porch stairs. Long ago, he had decided to stick it out and witness the Apocalypse. She soon fell asleep in his arms, and he sat with her in the night.18

The world was quiet, except for the normal animal noises. He shook his head at them. Animals were supposed to know when the world was about to go to Hell, but now it was the ignorant humans who had the forewarning. Unless there was a Dr. DoLittle in the house, the animal kingdom was going to die oblivious. Part of him wished he were so lucky. Knowing exactly when he and everyone he cared about were going to die had screwed with his head. All he could do was wrap his arms around her until the collision.19

The sky lightened in the east. He checked his watch. It read five thirty-four a.m. Earth was rubble at seven. Resolutely, he stared where the sun would rise, waiting for the end.20

Dawn rose, joyfully starting a new day that wouldn’t last for more than half an hour. The first rays fell on Annie and Lyle. She cradled a plastic cup like her cherished teddy bear, and he held her the same way.21

An empty, blue-green bottle lay in the dirt glinting in the light until the end.22

Author notes

Wrote this...huh, four years ago as a way to get out of writing a final psychology paper. Unfortunately, I lost the first three parts and this bit is all that remains. Don't know if its corny, it was a while ago, but I remember it in a vaguely fond way.

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  • Orual
    January 4, 2008

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    Not too corny. I liked it. I found it odd that you said they were trying to catch a glimmer of the meteor, though. I suppose it is possible that they wouldn't be able to see the meteor if it hit in the other hemisphere, but I think it would hard to miss something that big in the sky. And it would just make for a neat description. But on the whole, I thought this was a really interesting look at the world's last night.


  • Seria
    December 31, 2007
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    It makes you wonder how it's going to all end, y'know. Very thought provoking work. Good job.


  • RoseBlossom100
    December 19, 2007

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    My Long Review As Is My Duty As Contest Hostess

    Six Traits Of Writing

    Ideas and Content: I liked the way you took dooms day and didn't focus on the mass hysteria or religious freak outs. It brings something new and I like it. Your details added to the idea with out being over whelming.

    Organization: Very well done opening and conclusion. The flow of events fits the pace and it feels natural good job.

    Voice: I could really get a sense of "You". In this. It was unique while keeping with an idea that does not take too much explaining.

    Word Choice: Good words for your story. The vocabulary fit the piece so it didn't seem to make it corny or over done.

    Sentence Fluency: Good flow. It did not feel choppy and it flowed with a sort of poetic ring.

    Conventions: A few typos and a missing comma here and there but nothing truly distracting.


    Contest Qualifications

    Detail: For the overall feel of the piece the details were well placed. Though for this contest I was really searching for in-depth details. I love this piece but it didn't really have as many details as I would have liked.

    Emotion: Good insight to your characters revealed their emotions and made it more real. It was very well done.

    I loved this piece over all. Thank you for the entry and good luck.


  • Rini
    December 18, 2007

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    I honestly don't think it was corny. If anything vaguely cliche, but I don't think so. I liked it. It was well written and you use wonderful imagery. I actually felt doomed while I read it. It was really good, in my humble opinion. Even though there was apparently more parts to begin with, the story stands on it's own just fine. I almost don't want to read more. I love it how it is. As much as I would have loved to read about the end of the world, and what Lyle saw and felt, I like how you ended it with an image of a bottle in the dirt.

    Although the story didn't initially make me sad or emotional, thinking back on it now, I'm getting all emotional for the characters. "She cradled a plastic cup like her cherished teddy bear, and he held her the same way." That's the line that gets to me the most.