He pulled the sheets up, tucking his now freezing hands inside to bring a little warmth to his deteriorating body; kidney failure would do that but, if he willed it back, then surely he would once again pull through.
A contest entry
- : Take a Second and Come In! (Read it ALL or do not enter!) by Taylor Renee.
500 points, ended January 6, 2008, 48 entries
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Aw...this is so sad. It's funny how just a couple sentences can have an impact. Can little kids really get kidney failure?
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I did this as a sort of tribute to my brother, who died that morning. He wasn't young but it can hit anyone. There was a story on ABC tonight about a school principal who donated a kidney to one of his elementary students.
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Oh, wow! This is so....almost heartbreaking!
Absolutely beautiful, nontheless!
So different from the rest, which I love. It's so sad, and it says so much in so few words. Just what I wanted.
And the vocabulary is extraordinary. You worded it perfectly.
Nice work.
Thanks so muc hfor the entry, and i wish you the best of luck.
xox
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Thanks Amigo
It was odd to find your contest that night. My brother had died in the morning and, as always, he was in denial. Seemed fitting to put it to paper.
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Oh, wow! This is so....almost heartbreaking!
Absolutely beautiful, nontheless!
So different from the rest, which I love. It's so sad, and it says so much in so few words. Just what I wanted.
And the vocabulary is extraordinary. You worded it perfectly.
Nice work.
Thanks so muc hfor the entry, and i wish you the best of luck.
xox
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Tay
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nice sentence... makes u want to know more about what happened and whats going to happen.
gud luck in the contest xo
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