They don't understand

"What is wrong with you!! Just leave me alone! I don't love you anymore and you are just going to have to move on." The words hit me like a slap in the face. All his anger expressed in one giant explosion. Well, I don't love him anymore either. He is going crazy just because I still want to be friends. I can't help the way he feels, and sometimes I can't help the way I feel. I couldn't be with him anymore. I stand up and leave. 1

I keep walking. I don't know where I started from or where I was going. Sometimes it's better not to know. I just keep walking, his harsh words echoing in my head. My mind is blank, I can't think. Nothing affects my emotions anymore. At least, not in public. I never let anyone see who I really am. I hide. In myself. It might seem like a stupid hiding place, but it's warm and safe. I'm the only one who knows me like I do. He will never understand me. Neither will any of my friends, no matter how close they are. They can think they understand me, but no one does. And I won't say I'm the only one. I don't understand them either. I don't even want to.

Its my first story. What do you think?

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  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    February 21, 2008
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    Very well written. I can say I have been there before to. I always wonder if there is anyone at all that really understands me lol. I can relate to a lot of what you said. I recently have been dealing with some similar emotions and it can really be hard to take. I don't want to understand some people either. I am afraid to actually.
    ~Joann


  • Peppermint star xxx
    December 30, 2007
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    I absolutely loved the dialogue.It hit me like a car crash.This was very well done.It reminds me alot of my ex-boyfriend,So i could relate very well.I also liked The end."I don't even want to know." was a very powerful line,and it made the story all the more touching.You should definitly keep working! i honestly didn't want this to stop!

    beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


    • musik-freek
      January 13, 2008
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      Thanks, I was feeling a bit sad about the breakup even though it was last year in february and i decided to write something. My poetry muse was blocked so i wrote a story instead... I think it was kinda crap but thats coz i wrote it. If someone else wrote it it may be different. Thanks for the comment.