A single red thread tied around my finger to remind me of your stunning eyes as they scorched my heart, a piece of heaven just out of reach, before the day you turned those eyes on someone else.
A contest entry
- : Take a Second and Come In! (Read it ALL or do not enter!) by Taylor Renee.
500 points, ended January 6, 2008, 48 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
I am female and I entered your contest because its challenging and pushs me to be a better writer ^^
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I liked it: short, sweet, packed with emotion, relatable (if that's a word), great use of language, and I'd guess above and beyond what Taylor was wanting.
Kudos and good luck with the contest -
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Thank you. ^^ I got honorable winner. Yay!
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Wheee- Japanese folk tale reference...
I want to know what happens. Even if it is a contest entry, it would be sooo cool to see what comes next. X3
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*blush*
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Oh my gosh!
I absolutely love this. I can see, without even looking at my list, that you used way more than one of my words, which I LOVE!
And this was written so beautifully, with just the right vocabulary and imagery!
A really nice sentence, indeed.
One question:
Why did the thread remind him/her of her/his eyes and why was it around his/her finger?
Well, that's two, actually
Thanks so much for entering, AND following the rules, AND going one step above!
Good luck!!!
xopxo
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Tay
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You'e never heard of that old wives' tale of tying a red thread around your finger to remind you of something important? ^^ hehe it was the first thing I thought of. and he/she wears the thread to remind him/her of hs/her loved one (that when he thinks of her/him, thinks first of her/his eyes). ^^''
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Aww. Very short. Very sad. And also. Amanda Panda! *hugs* (im' much more huggable online )
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o'rly!? *tackle hug* ^^ hey candace fandace! (.... I am very lonely) missed yous! how are you? ^^ hmm yes?
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