Lets sit alone, I mean really see alone and contemplate something here. 1
Have you ever felt alone?
Yeah sure you have-- no I mean the alone were your in a room full of people but your invisible...2
Let me tell you that is a part of life, is it not... to remain invisible to everyones eye.3
Of course if you are normal, straight have a hot boyfriend , clone friends, and a personality that makes dirt seem more interesting than sure... you not inviable.. you just the shining light that show everyone the way to be just like them.4
My name is Blake...
No I am not a boy
For my name is Blair
No I am not a girl5
Have I confused you, well I am rather sorry, but I think it is about time we get some things straight.. oh excuse the pun for I am not straight, and if I was I would be in the ground by now, from slitting my wrist into a thousand shades of red..6
I don't do straight, hence I don't even do commitment.. until met I someone .. But he shall remain anonymous for now..7
By the way ... I am gay... hope you don't mind cause if yo have a problem with it well u can suck my left nut fucker.. cause I don't really give a shit about your never, shallow homophobia, get a life, we all have to live in this world and I'm sure as hell ain't gonna live it in the shadow of a man lost in regret cause sum tight ass couldn't get his finger out of his ass and look at me like a normal person..8
yes I am Him
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Just an Idea needed of my chest
In a list
Honest OPINIONS
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gay is good and your right, if people have a problem with it they should go suck and egg. your still human and no I wont go into the whole if you prick us do we not bleed speciel.
I wouldn't care if you were purple with pink polka dots, I would still be your friend.
Keep up the good work.
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Have you ever felt alone?
Yeah sure you have-- no I mean the alone were your in a room full of people but your invisible...
Hell yeah I have...though not quit in the same way that you describe here. More good work from you. I admit that if I did not know you I would find this confusing to understand...but I do understand.
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this is a great story. keep it up
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Good story, very well written. I was confused at first, but it cleared up very well towards the end.
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I think it was a little bit on the odd side... But great nonetheless
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I’d like to know who is counting the chromosomes when we're born! So you turn out gay – so what! I have met a lot of interesting people and some of those were gay. I am a straight guy, and like to think I am open-minded, but we are all need emotional support whatever your orientation.
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paragraph 2 were -> where and your -> you're
Make sure your "You"s and "your"s are corrected.
Ok... so this piece is actually pretty interesting until the 2nd to last paragraph. You go from being intriguing and leaving me with a desire to learn more about you to just completely leaving me in the dust of profanity and confusion. -
is that your real pic? lol pretty cool I know how you feel...since im bi anyway...cya l8tr
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moshin4all
I wish buddy thats my ultimate fantasy..sadly I am still girl *_* >< thansk for reading mate.....
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You seem to be assuming things here...lumping your reading audience into one bag. And meanwhile, the piece comes off as angry...and hostile. What's the point? Are you trying to say something? Say it. Are you just pissed off? Is this the place for it? Are you just venting? Who cares? Would we venture to read your delightful stuff again? (Not that I think you really care...at least you don't give the impression you would.)
I'd back off a little. The stuff is hardly as literate as I think you might like it to be...and p r e t t y...angry and hate filled.
Should I love it? How could I.
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There's no story to this. It's just a prolonged and overdramatic opinion. Of course, it's for a good cause and all that. But I don't care, unless there's a story involved. I mean, everyone has problems, what makes this narrative worth reading? Because it's about a hot button issue? Big deal. I'd love to tell you this is a great idea, because there are some good spots in there, but it doesn't appear to be a story. This actually reads more like a ranting. It is, I guess. There's a beginning, but there's no middle or end. This basically says 'I hate you because you hate me.' Ok. Now tell me a story that involves this...
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various
FAIR ENOUGH... It is ranting sure is and everyone percives storys as whatever there minds think.. thanks for commenting and being honest
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Um...Interesting, I do know the invisable feeling. And though I do not support being gay and what not, I do get your ending. Just to be taken and liked for who you are. There are some grammatical errors, but other than that, nice expression of feelings.
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interesting i dig the concept and as an invisible person (invisible in many different ways)i feel you more than made your point it would be foolish not to respect you or to respect ourselves for that matter
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Theres the chappy.
I did enjoy this piece, your story has a nice pace, the dialog is tip top and I like the descriptive volcabulary that you use.
Excellent!
All the best.
jsdk. Rewarded 4
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What kind of comment is this jsdk? There is no story. There is no dialogue. How can you comment like this unless you're just copy and pasting some crappy little thing without actually reading a 200 word story?
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jsdk *_*
thanks dude..meant a lot... thank you for reading
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i liekd the whole being invisible concept even tho other ppl around. i can relate to that. id give u 5 stars but i dont think i can lol.
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lost ^_^
thanks dude lol means a lot thanks for reading
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Great write. I agree we are who we are.and we love who we love.
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You sound like a ganstar! But awesome idea! I love the line 'until met I someone .. But he shall remain anonymous for now', brill! Haven't meet him yet so of course he is anonymous! Love it!
At my uni the columns often use ve or hir, traditional gender terms are looked down on a tad, I personally think it very cool. But I am a feminist, I would say that.
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fairy*_*
long time thanks for reading so much
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Very cool idea, I really like it. However, I wouldn't use abriviations like "u". Very strong message though, and interesting.
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the wall *_*
Thank you for reading and taking onboard the message loved it .. love comments
blair
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Very nice...
I'm not gay, yet I can relate to this one in so many ways, because I've ever been invisible. It never ceases to amaze me as to how many people online see my words and take them to heart, and yet people never seem to see ME--on the street, at parties, at stores. To be one's self is to set yourself apart from the masses. For all it's pain, it is the closest thing to divinity that most of us could ever reach.
This piece was powerful, and the emotion rings true for everyone who ever stood apart from the crowd and said "I am him." for ANY reason.
Never feel alone...
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crazy *_^
its people who try people that sometimes let themselves down... me myslef I would never ut anyone in that place... you made a good piont and your words seemed to hit home
I respect straight peoples way of life.. so why cant they respect mine thats my theory ....
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crazy *_^
being all emotional when I read ur comment I started crying.... its so true.. yet people degrade and abuse the most kindest and compassionate of people with rel hearts fo gold why.. beacuase were gay, lesbian, bi transgendered.. its bullshit... its life they need to get over it....
I hope i can at least grt my message across that I am him and I cant and wont deny it any longer -
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To deny who you are is to leave yourself with nothing, and nothing has no options.
Never let the masses and their conceptions of what is and isn't 'right' even so much as sway how you feel about yourself. Only you can be you, and only I can be me, and the world would be a lesser place without either of us.
I am a homophobic, truthfully, simply because every gay guy I've ever tried to be friends with 'tried' me, and it just got creepy for me over time. THAT said, while I made different choices than you, I'd never bash you for living your life the way you want. So while you're feeling persecuted by the 'bashers' I would like to gently remind you not to be the other side of the coin, because you quite obviously have something significant to contribute. Fuck 'em if they don't get it.
If I say something that no one understands, does that make me the moron? Not really.
So if you do something that no one seems to understand, well...
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Homophobics SUCK. I'm not straight either, and I know there are haters out there.
I like this. It seems like a diary entry, or perhaps a letter to the world. Nonetheless, it's amazing. It makes me think of the people that say, "Screw your phobia. I'm gay, live with it!"
So, great work, and bravo to you!
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siby*_*
Sure does SUCK... but at the end of the day we are who we are..whether were straight or not.. so fuck them all lol
thank you for reading
and ur support
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I agree!
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siby*_*
TO right u are
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p.s the pic of the chinese, japanese, erm... asian? well what ever ethnicity he is... he is well cute! *drool* lol
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" from slitting my wrost into a thousand shades of red.." omg!! love this sentence it is excellent, don't love the subject like because it is terrible to think you need to slit your wrists, but the poetic blast you give the readers with that awesome sentence is brilliant. I is abit confusing slightly the 1st bit but it picks up and your start to understand what you are trying to get across in the end. I have read your parts in the wrong order but they are both supurberly written (pardon the spelling of supurb? lol) again a few spelling mistakes but we all make those, this is a brilliant piece, and I like how you have laid it out on the background of a note book, makes it feel like a diary entry, i like that idea! well done brillant work!! keep it up!
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crystal *_^
thank you..one for reading and for being supportive. I shall keep my writing up.. LOL WORK on the darn spelling
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Wonderful
I really like how this was written. It was a little confusing, though, but I did understand nearly all of it.
I can kind of relate to what you're saying here, I've always been considered different, but I adapted and found real friends. Granted, I only have a few, but they're everything.
This must be confusing but I'm sure you'll get through just fine... this writing seems to show what a strong passionate person you are.
Again, though... good job
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midnight *_*
Thank you... Yes when it comes to life I have my bad moments but at the end of the day I do what makes me happy... and well my passion lies in writing so.. If I can touch just one person... thats all I Ask FOR
love blair
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This is really deep. After reading it the second time I kind of got the jist of what you were saying. I really like it I hope you expand on it. It makes sense in a twisted, confusing sort of way.
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whisper ^_^
thank you very much for reading .. I Hoped you did lol ^_^
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I got it.
I saw in a comment below that the spelling shouldn't be minded (but please message me if you'd like some help with it) so I'll only give my personal opinion.
Basically, that section that was meant to confuse meant that you were physically a girl, but on the inside a guy.
But I must go back to the rant about "normal, straight" people. This is very true, but there are varying degrees of normalcy. The degree you're looking at is the degree of people who involve themselves into certain cliques, namely the popular crowd. I personally stay away from all cliques in order to develop my own unique and interesting personality. Hell, the "normal" people you speak of all hate to write, and I'm here, right?
The norm is to hate all gays.
The norm is to be racist.
The norm is to only care about yourself and maybe your friends.
The norm is to be intolerant of others' beliefs.
The norm is to just be hateful.
Maybe that could have been a section of this piece, because it's true and seems to correspond with what you're saying. I used to be a homophobe, but that was years ago when I was trying to fit in with the norm. Now I wish gays would be given their rights. My defense: if someone's personal life does not affect you in any adverse way, whether or not they may "creep you out," stay out of it.
That's really all I have to say. This is quite a powerful statement, but a little more might make it more interesting and give your point of argument a more solid standing point.
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shank^_*
thanks for reading buddy...
yes I know homophobia makes me angry at straight people i think i get caught up in what has happend
but thanks for reading and sure help wherever u can
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Maybe a little too harsh on the reader? Bah, I gotta go drop an aunt off at work. Keep going, yeah?
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pern *_^
fair enuff lol honest heheh
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Drama and confusion, just what I needed to read
This is completely awesome, sure as hell beats the lame book I'm reading. =].
The title is interesting, I love how you made it seem like people can relate but at the same time not relate, pure goodness.
All I can say is I loved it. =].
Kudos.
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rja *_*
YAY... HEHE HAPPY FACE.... LOL THANKS FOR READING
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< elle*_^
naww no probs I am easlily confused which made me write this so hehe... thansk for reading 
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I found the title quite interesting and it led me to want to read your piece.
I am not sure if some spelling words were meant to be misspelled because of the type of writing style you are trying to portray. If you meant to misspell, forgive me, but if not - I will make a note of it.
Paragraph 1 - Let's sit alone,
Paragraph 2 - ..alone where you're in a room full of people but you're invisible
Paragraph 3 should have a question mark
There are a few comma misplacements but if you are writing in a journal or a letter, then you are just showing the character's personality.
I was moved by your writing because everyone has felt alone. It is just the degree in which you have that feeling. It's funny how someone can feel alone in a room full of people. I never really understood that when I first heard it, but it's true. Sometimes you can feel quite alone when you are in a relationship as well.
Your story brings that out and the reader feels for your character. Near the end, you can feel the rage that just comes pouring out.
Is the character mad at himself/herself for trying to conform to society or is he/she trying to still figure things out and is upset that the goal hasn't been reached?
It is a very interesting piece and well written in such a way that you can feel the emotion of the character.
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witch *_^
I guess in a way it is autobiograpy to a degree. mind my silly spelling... She is angry...she is bitter.. she is societys threat to a immoral humanity in some eyes
But she is who she is.. she is Him... a boy trapped inside a girl..so i guess in a way she is trying to let society know she wont be conforming to there standars and that she is who she is... no shit bout it
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okay.
I get it and it a really good introduction. I'm a little confused, though. Really good so far, but I have a feeling the next part I'll understand more.
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dark *_^
yeah i plan of expanding it... depending on my feeling and emotions..ill make it clearer soon ^_^ thanks
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I liked it and it's good that you don't give a shit about what other people think.
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juju *_^
Dman right I dont... you only live once... be free for expression
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Wow...
Really good. Thoughts and sentences were amazing.
I don't have a problem with gay people, so, I support you if you are.
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TORA ^_*
DID IT MAKE SENSE.. a girl lovin men, who thinks she is gay..who thinks shes a guy yeah teenage confusion at ite best ^_^ LOL THANK YOU *_*
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Ok....wat is this? Its well written and powerful, don't really know what else to say
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alf ^_^
Its me trying the best way I can to jstify how I am feeling right now... thanks for reading
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Needs more work
I'm sorry in advance, this is going to sound harsh.
You really need to go through this again, and work a bit on the spelling and grammar. And those internet bastardizations like 'u' for 'you' et cetera? They're not cute.
And seriously, light green on white? it's very hard on the eyes. I suggest you either switch the background to black, or choose a darker font colour.
Oh yeah, and congrats on coming out of the closet. The applause is really just for that.
. Rewarded 8
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Maz *_*
YAY HONESTY.. yep im planning on expanding I hate spelling am crap at it.... lol am gay but it is the weirdest twisted form of gay u shall fine yet it is normal.. am a gay, woman but is presented as a gay man on man gay confusing..ask some scientist to explain...
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there are some VERY POWERFUL sentences in here. but i think you take away from the seriousiness when you said "left nut fucker"
that just seemed childish. just imo.
but like i said their are very powerful sentences here. for example:
shallow homophobia, get a life, we all have to live in this world and I'm sure as hell ain't gonna live it in the shadow of a man lost in regret
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my favorite part:
Of course if you are normal, straight have a hot boyfriend , clone friends, and a personality that makes dirt seem more interesting than sure... you not inviable.. you just the shining light that show everyone the way to be just like them
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werner *_*
thanks dude..
yer I know suck my left nut bit meh
but thanks for reading and having favourite parts
and honesty is a virtue i enjoy
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omg...its so angry!! the whole thing...but its good...i like the way u presented ur thoughts..vividly! pretty good stuff. keep it like up! XD
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Aaez
gee thanks dude.. yeh angry all right but I had to just let it rip.. I needed some kind of closure for the anger I was feeling.... thansk for the applause
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