To the world,1
so harsh so cruel,2
understand my mental attitude,3
I am of one,4
one mind,5
one body,6
and two different images given by few,7
I know your thoughts,8
are edgy and unkempt,9
thinking I am one of plenty,10
who’ll give in to your rant,11
about what I am made,12
and who you think me as,13
but to tell the truth,14
I don’t care.15
I am my own,16
and live to find happiness and truth,17
I love all,18
and hate few.19
You can speak behind my back,20
for no matter what you say or do,21
I am one boat,22
In a murderous storm,23
that rages and makes waves,24
so rough and mean,25
to destroy me,26
but on this boat,27
is where I stay,28
never tipping or turning over,29
to give it satisfaction of defeat,30
never giving in,31
and when the storm is done,32
it’s rampage faltered,33
there I stand calm serene,34
unbothered and unnerved,35
forever sailing onward,36
through cruel storms and unfaltering whirlpools,37
that wish to draw me into,38
the depths of the sea,39
to pummel and destroy my very being.40
But here I stand unmoving and firm,41
not in a boat,42
but on land,43
not sea that wishes to destroy me but people,44
whose words do others harm,45
but not to me,46
these words don’t touch me,47
they are just droplets falling,48
touching but never harming,49
sinking into the ground,50
where they are sucked in,51
to be repeated when thought needed.52
So speak harsh world,53
continue your cruel rattle,54
your banter of falseness,55
cause I’ll stand strong and never fall,56
from the words that sear.57
Cause fear that you send in others,58
will not touch me here.59
A contest entry
- 1,000 Points for poetry!!! by Forgotten Anomaly.
1000 points, ended March 26, 2008, 58 entries
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Comments
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Well to be honest I found it a little bit boring towards the end as it seemed to be an endless rant of how you felt and what was going on. It was not a bad poem at all, but I felt it could use some kind of event or something to bring the interest factor back up. Also, the format was a bit... weird. I think using stanzas and so forth would make it more appealing.
Well done, thanks for entering =] -
Ah, finally grammer! Read one too many blocky, commaless, over capitalized poems today! The meaning in this one is strait foreword which can be good or bad depending on who's reading it. I liked it. It was not cliche or overdone. I like the medaphore of the boat at sea, I feel like that a lot of the time.
Thank you for entering, and good luck.


