The Christmas decorations were up and glowing,
The angel's gown on the tree was gold and flowing,
Angie wove tinsel around the shelf,
She then danced back outside like Santa's head elf.1
Danny walked in and let out a gasp,
"Oh bugger," his voice came out in a rasp,
"It's Christmas time! Oh dear God not again!"
He screamed ran around in a circle and banged his head.2
Angie came back with a worried look on her face,
"Danny? Watch out - you'll mess up the place!
"I don't care if you hate Christmas; I won't be disturbed!
"You are a silly little boy; a cowardly cur!"3
She left the room again to fetch more decorations,
Singing Christmas Carols similar to incantations,
Danny sat up, rubbing his crown
"Well if I'm unwanted, I won't hang around!"4
He was tempted to march out the front door right then
But the cold, cold snow made him think again.
For you see Danny detested the Christmas holiday,
Well, specifically; only a certain part, I say!5
He enjoyed the presents and getting out of school,
He enjoyed the roasts; over which he would drool,
He loved the 'fairy' lights; even though the name wasn't great,
But he had one curse upon him as a cruel twist of fate.6
He didn't mind the rellies coming over to stay,
(He'd avoid cheek-pinching by keeping out of their way)
He didn't mind the extra jobs so all was ready,
And he could put up with the occasional pink teddy.7
There was only one problem he had at Christmas time,
('Scuse us if this part of the poem doesn't rhyme),
Yes the one problem he had that worked up his oars;
Was his terrible phobia of Santa Claus!8
Poor Danny had absoloutley no idea,
How he had developed such a crippling fear,
He had had it since childhood; and all the years past,
When Saint Nick was around, boy would he run fast!9
Angie was sympathetic (some of the time),
But there were occasions where she crossed the line,
Like that Christmas incident a few years back;
She tied little Danny in a Santa sack!10
Or the year before on a show ride with Rudolph,
The plastic Santa had scared Danny's boots off!
But Danny was very determined this year,
No matter what; he would not cower in fear!11
He sat up on Christmas Eve out front of the house,
(And yes; nothing was stirring, not even a mouse!)
Danny armed himself with a deer-shooting rifle,
His eye was twitching; Santa was trifle!12
And suddenly Santa arrived on the roof,
"SANTA I'LL GET YOU AND YOUR STUPID MOOSE!"
Danny loaded and shooted - and shooted again!
Until Santa fell with a thump - was he dead?13
Danny crowed loudly into the night sky,
"Get lost reindeer! Shoo! Scat! FLY!"
Danny hooted with glee, running over to the dead body,
Santa raised his head, "Shove it kid; don't get cocky!"14
Danny fell backwards in surprise,
He thought Santa was a jolly guy!
Saint Nick dusted himself off and looked at Danny strangely,
"W-T-F, mate??? I've done hard work for you daily!"15
"I slave away with the elves in my shop,
"Making the toys; then down chimneys I drop!
"And for what? You complain when I don't get the right toys,
"You can be so ungrateful, you little girls and boys!"16
Danny's jaw dropped; he never thought of it that way,
"Um...sorry Santa," he managed to say,
He gave a little sob, and started to cry,
Santa's harsh expression softened, he let out a sigh.17
"I'm sorry Danny I didn't mean to yell like that,
"But that's the fourth time I've been shot at."
Danny looked up as the big guy gave him a hug,
He was aghast, and his heartstrings gave a tug.18
"I'm sorry too Santa; I won't shoot you no more!"
With that, he dropped the rifle to the floor,
BANG! It went off as it hit the ground,
Letting out a big clashing explosive sound.19
It made them both jump; nearly taking out Santa,
And startled the reindeer into a canter,
The noise made Santa faint with a hint of charm,
Danny made a mental note not to drop loaded arms.20
He took Santa inside, and gave him some milk and cookies,
"Don't eat too many others, Santa; it'll ruin your toothies!"
They both gave a chuckle and Angie walked in from bed,
She looked from Danny to Santa and she too fainted.21
Santa walked over to Angie and peered,
"Why does everyone always faint around here?"
Danny helped him carry Angie back up to bed,
St. Nick gave a grin and shook his head.22
"Thanks for the help Danny, but I've gotta go,
"There are presents waiting to be delivered you know."
For once, Danny was not afraid.
"You're the best friend I've ever made!"23
Santa smiled warmly down at Danny's single tear,
"Don't worry young man, there's always next year!"
And with a wink of his eye, there were approaching hooves,
And suddenly Santa was climbing back onto the roof.24
Danny ran through the door and ran outside,
He and Santa waved their final goodbye,
"Merry Christmas to all! And to all a good night!"
And with those last words he flew out of sight.
A contest entry
- 'Twas the night before Christmas by SageSyren.
575 points, ended January 3, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - A Change In Me by moonwriter.
900 points, ended February 4, 14 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Merry Christmas XD
Comments
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This was very cute. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
Brooke
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That is a nice story. Cool. I like your avatar. It is really cute.I have one now. It is also Sailor Moon. Finally a avatar.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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from Paula
Your poem was written very well.
beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.
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ok i'm done i give up i'm through
i will never be as good as you
so you cant rhyme anywords with bed
and you've got somthing wrong with your head
but hey, what were you supposed to do? -
ok i give up, i'm done i'm through
i will never stand up to you
so you have an issue with rhyming words with bed
and you've got somthing wrong with YOUR HEAD
but hey what else were you supposed to do -
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BOOYAH vienner! *dances*
...I never want to see another rhyme again..
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you have but up a good fight!
yee would make one fine knight
and as i find my self saying
you've done good playen
i somehow still find myself right.
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Indeed you yourself have been a worthy foe
But it is not in my nature to pack up, run and go
I reckon that I've you beat
Get outta the kitchen if you can't stnad the heat
**This message brought straight from Lainy Co.**
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how dare you insult matilder!
now i'm going to kill yer
you will soon see
your going to have toes for teeth
then i'm going to bring out the chair!!
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Au contrare; I insulted no-one in the last void
You're imagining things Bender; getting a little paranoid?
Thanks for the chair offer but I must decline
I'm already sitting on this one; go back to your nursery rhymes
You're a funny one, oh little humanoid
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you think you have won?
with your useless puns?
your a damm right siss
and even a priss!
and you look like Mr. Scotts SON!! -
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Siss?
Who's making up words now?
You're going down!
Yer getting desperate, jumping my roadblocks
Just admit it; I rock yer socks!
Had enough? I can go on for another hour!
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you think your so hot?
what a load of rot
why it's easy to see
the best rhymer is me
so bring it! give me your best shot! -
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I don' think I'm hot, I KNOW coz it's true!
And I'm gunna walk all up and down you!
You call yerself a pimp?
Yer more like a chimp!
I'll take that trophy now, thankyou.
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you and you?
please take your time
to find words that rhyme
otherwize it sounds as silly
as eatiing piping hot chilly
just face it your rhymes will never be as good as mine!
comeon you rhyming with you? thats just stupid
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Mate I can beat that easily
What u tryna do? Start a war with me?
Well I say you can bring it on man!
I'll get you, your green eggs AND yer ham!
Who rhymes the best? We shall soon see!
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a very charming piece... and delightfully different. i really enjoyed this!
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lol nice lainy. i like the way you seem to ryme most words but if you can't find the right words you just make a big joke out of it. i really liked the mouse bit and i noticed there is a bit that dosn't rhyme.
and i quote
"They both gave a chuckle and Angie walked in from bed,
She looked from Danny to Santa and she too fainted."
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actually it does; you have to seperate the syllables. Allow me to quote:
"They both gave a chuckle and Angie walked in from bed,
She looked form Danny to Santa, and she too FAINT-ED."
It only just rhymes XD You have to put emphasis on the "ed" bit.
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Great Story.Not bad for the Christmas Time.
beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 3, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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