He woke up with sweat beads running down his head. Rajin Bracyer was only 16 years old and he was the most accomplished young mage in his class. He wasn't able to conjure most spells but his best were the ones that involved fire. As he got out of bed and was getting dressed his brother Valon Bracyer ran into his room with tears down his eyes. "Mom and dad sent me up here to get u out of the house. they wanted me to take you to the next town for help!" Valon said. "What are you talking about Valon?" Rajin asked. "The Mages of Kelnor are here. They're trying to kill everyone in the town. Mom and dad are downstairs fighting trying to stop them." As soon as Rajin heard that he pulled on his mages robes and ran out the door. He made it to the downstairs hallway right by the front door when it was blasted into splinters. The blast sent Rajin back into a wall and he slid to the ground. As he tried to get up he saw that a figure with black robes had walked in the front door and aimed it's palm at him. Rajin got up as quick as he could and thrusted his hand forward and conjured a fireball. He thrusted the fireball at the dark figure just as the figure sent one at him. The fireballs collided and exploded and Rajin was thrown back again into the same wall and broke right through it. He got back up still a little hurt but thrust his hand out again and conjured another fireball. Just as the dark figure looked at him, Rajin hurled the fireball at it and the fireball exploded into the figure's chest exploding on him and sending him through the window dying. Rajin ran out of the house through what was the front door and grabbed the dark figures short sword. He looked around and saw soldiers attacking the villagers one at a time. Then Rajin spun around and saw that a soldier was about to shove it's short sword into a little girl. Rajin ran towards them and thrusted his hand out again and concentrated. A bolt of lightning came out of his hand and hit the soldier and the soldier dropped. As Rajin made it to the little girl, the soldier got back up and raised his sword. Rajin saw the terrified look in the girls eyes and spun around bringing his own blade up. Steel clanged against steel as the blades hit. Rajin tried to use all of his strength to push the soldier back but he couldn't do it. Finally he hit the soldier again with another bolt of lightning and then he shoved the short sword into the soldiers chest. As he pulled the blade out, blood spilled everywhere and the soldier fell. Rajin told the little girl to run back to the house and he ran to go find his parent's. A couple minutes later he found his parent's. They were barely standing and their bodies had smoke coming up from them. Suddenly there was a blast of lightning and the parent's dropped just barely alive. Rajin looked at his parent's and looked at the Dark mages. Then one by one the mages hit Rajin with fireball's after fireballs. As Rajin was hit by each fireball his strength weakened. Finally, his legs gave and he fell to the ground, his body smoking. He looked at his parent's and saw how burned and bloody they were. He remembered his brother who was almost as old as he was. He felt anger and hatred unlike anything he had ever felt before in his life. As his anger grew so did his power. Finally he stood up and looked at the dark mages while holding onto his left arm. He was barely standing as the dark mages looked into his eyes and what they saw had scared them. He had what looked like black fire inflaming his pupils. He thrust his hand out and hurled a giant column of black fire at the mages. One mage jumped out of the way while the rest were burned. As Rajin kept the blaze going the soldiers and all the dark mages around them were burned to a crisp. Finally the magic he used had exhausted everything he had left. He watched the dark mage, he hadn't killed, disappear and he fell to the ground. He looked at his parent's and just before he passed out the father said," Don't let your power control you!" Then Rajin faded into darkness and his power faded. Valon walked up to where his brother was and saw that he was unconsciousness. He had seen the power that his brother had shown and then had ran to see him. Valon was so jealous that he didn't even wake his brother. He left his brother to die or stay unconscious whichever came first. Valon walked to the dead soldier that Rajin had stabbed with the sword and grabbed his sword. Then he grabbed whatever else he could salvage from the soldier and took off for the woods. He left his brother where he was laying and went to grow stronger. He even hoped he could grow stronger then his brother.
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awsome
That ws really good. I like the details and all that. You should so keep it up.beginning: 4, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 2, characters: 4.
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Not bad, Mike. I liked it. You need to keep writing, you tell me that all the time.
Love you.
Kaylabeginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

