"Dont leave..." she wimpers. "Please, hang on." Shes beautiful, I think. Beautiful. A let out another roar of pain.1
"I can't" I say to her, looking down at my wound. My stomache is crushed inwards; Just shows you what happens when you play with fire. Infront of a herd of buffaloes. "You- Gotta admit. It was funny." I let off a low chuckle, with is splutterred by a cough of blood. "Oh god..."2
Amanda always looked pretty in my eyes. Funny, too. We had been friends since Primary. I mentally kick myself as I ask myself why I've never asked her out.3
"We're calling the doctors," she says panically. "Oh god just hang on." 4
I turn my crooked head towards my best friend, Leonard. He was laughing when I got trampelled, hell, why shouldn't he laugh, he was the one that dared me to do it. Why shouldnt of he laughed? I notice ironically that he isn't laughing now.5
"I'm sorry man," he says. "Im so sorry, just hang on." I feebly lift my hand and rest it on his shoulder. 6
"I forgive you, but after I cark it you have to go jump off a building or something." No one laughs except for me. They probably think its wierd that I crack off a joke when Im dying. Or they think Im serious. Maybe I should try and do a magic trick.7
"I love you guys," I say. "Keep doing stuff." My last words. Keep doing stuff. What a legend Ill be.8
"I love you," says Amanda, and she kisses me softly. "And I would have loved you more, if only you just stopped being such a god damn joker!" I tremble as I feel it. Or maybe its my stomach on the verge of exploding.9
"I love you to," I whisper, so she must place her head by my mouth to hear. "Now get the hell away from me. You've got cooties." 10
I beckon Sean to come closer. "Keep care of her. My god, if you don't, Ill never let you sleep again." He laughs grimmly. 11
"I will, mate, now sleep. Tell Hitler that I don't like him."12
"I will buddy."13
I close my eyes, and let myself fall into a deep sleep, focussing on one memory, the pretty figure of Amanda Stuarts. I keep her clothes on, despite temptation.
A contest entry
- Giving all my points by k3nny.
772 points, ended January 8, 2008, 20 entries
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His dead; Thefore, leaving forever. Lol.
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Umm well, I feel a lot of questions overwhelming my mind when I read this. Who is 'I'? Why is he departing forever? What has happened? Loads of questions need to be answered from my point of view. When you say more coming soon, i presume it's a series to be. Unfortunately, I'd really like to know the whole story for my contest, which means, I can have a clear view of what's happened.
Well, you have some spelling and punctuation errors here and there. So, you should be careful.
I'd really really like more details about the characters because I really feel a 'blank' in my mind. However, I believe it's a nice job though. I hope you'll continue writing and Gool Luck in the future!
Thanks for entering and have fun!
Merry Christmas and Happy New Year
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