The River of Life (Quadraphor, 4 lines- 5-7-5-7)

It cascades downwards,1

Shimmering in the sunlight,2

Moving air' onwards,3

Flowing unceasingly, life.4

By, Chaz D. Wolf

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  • Myeisha
    December 9, 2007

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    Cool poem, I love this one. Even know it's short, it still had a good little flow to it and it doesn't really need to be added to. I loved the imagery and I do agree with Hermanator1, but it's fine like this too.

    Keep on Writing!!


  • Hermanator1 silver member
    December 8, 2007

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    Good imagery

    You conveyed it effectively in a very short piece. I think it could be developed into a larger work.
    Certainly you effectively worked within the confines of the style. Have you ever tried Haiku?

    beginning: 3, plot: 3, ending: 3.