I look across the room and our eyes meet.1
As I gaze at you I feel as though my soul is drawing me to you.2
I see my future in your beautiful green eyes.3
I can't seem to look away.4
I don't even know your name and yet I feel as though I've known you for ever.5
We stare at each other for what seems like hours.6
I can't believe how familiar you seem to me.7
I can't think strait.8
I can barely breath.9
I think I'm in love with you.10
You come to where I sit, our eyes never breaking this spellbinding stare.11
You speak and it sends a shock through my body.12
I know I have met my true love.
Author notes
i wrote this a long time ago and i just decided to put it on here cause i got bored.
please tell me what you think. i want your honest opinion. thanxs.
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I think this is a really beautiful poem
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It is a great poem about a time that some people never experience. So for the people who never experience this, it is a great way to express how it's suppose to feel.
An error:
I can barely breath.9
It should be "breathe".
Great job.
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This has great flow and I did notice some mistakes.
I don't even know your name and yet I feel as though I've known you for ever.5
For ever is a compound word so it should be Forever.
I can't think strait.8
You mispelled Strait, It should be Straight.
You come to where I sit, our eyes never breaking this spellbinding stare.
Spellbinding is not a compound word, so it should be Spell binding.
You did a good choice of words in this poem and there weren't alot of mistakes.
Keep on Writing!!!
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ps pretty poetry/story (=
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oooooooo!! well well. lol I like it a lot. the moment of falling in love and yu've captured it simply, not at all overdone or sappy. nice (=
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