A dark, dimmed light1
I can barely see2
Constant pain flows3
As I walk silently4
alone.5
"Keep moving," I tell myself6
But the darkness is closing in7
Slowly ripping me apart,8
Yanking at each fragile limb9
Terror sinks in my blood-shot eyes10
There must be an escape!11
But the walls I run my fingers along are cold;12
And so is my heart.13
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this is how i felt when u broke up with me :/
i hope u kno it really hurt me to have to let you go
i will alwyas love you and i miss u so much i just wish i didnt feel depressed im in a state of like mental breakdowns and u deleted the poems about me on her am i really not worthy of being on this website sorry if i dont live up to thoses standards anymore sorry if u hate me cuz i kno u do i just wish i wasnt alive right now i dont want to deal with this pain anymore its too much i cant take it anymore i wish i could stop it but it keeps coming back u were my happiness now my happiness is gone and im left with nothin just hoping to get hit by a car or shot so i dont have to do it myself i hope u kno i really loved u and i always will. -
deep adn dark;...though honestly, i didn't get the overall of it. Was someone just depressed? Shut in somewhere.? It's my own dull mind that prevents me from seeing the concept...but the words are great and flow beautifully!
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i love the darkness is closing me in part.
beginning: 4, ending: 5.
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i love how everything flows and the last line kinda just hits you!
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That's the story of my life.
It's good. -
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The only problem i have is that you spelled apart wrong on line 8.
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