The blinding eye of death,21
Slowly set on the western horizon.32
The birth cry of the cocooning night,43
Exploded into the sky,54
With the light of a million stars.65
The scent of deadly nightshade,76
And funeral lily's,87
Drifted across the graveyard,98
Carried on a cool spring breeze.109
The father of all nightmares,1110
Picked up the alluring scent,1211
And stirred in his earthen bed.1312
It was springtime,1413
Everything was in bloom,1514
Including the virgins!1615
Puberty past,1716
Young rose buds,1817
That would open to his desires.1918
It had been a long,2019
Cold and lonely,2120
Fruitless winter,2221
And he was hungry,2322
In both,2423
Stomach and loin.2524
Eerily the hinges creaked,2625
As he opened the lid,2726
Of the mahogany box,2827
he had lain in,2928
For far too long!3029
Stricken with grief,3130
Over the death,3231
Of his dammed soul mate! 3332
The pain had carried him,3433
Through the winter,3534
Of his,3635
Broken black heart.3736
Not once had he fed,3837
Not once had he slipped,3938
His blood gorged member,4039
Into the valley,4140
Of his earth bound desires.4241
He had grieved as long,4342
As his instincts would allow.4443
it was springtime in the village,4544
And the virgins were waiting.4645
From a slit,4746
Cut into the heavy door,4847
Of his mausoleum,4948
He had watched her,5049
All winter.5150
Every evening,5251
At the twilight hour,5352
When his death,5453
Became life,5554
And dusk,5655
Swept across the land,5756
She would visit the grave,5857
Of her departed true love.5958
Wearing the cloth,6059
Of the convent,6160
Not yet married,6261
To God!6362
He could hear,6463
The beat of her heart,6564
pounding,6665
Beneath her supple,6766
Ripe breasts.6867
The pace of the beats,6968
Quickened,7069
As she laid on his grave,7170
And slipped her hand,7271
through an open seam,7372
Hidden in the fold,7473
Of her dress. 7574
Searching,7675
For that steamy mound,7776
She had saved for him!7877
As she arched her hips,7978
In ecstasy,8079
Amidst the muffled moans,8180
of her forbidden fantasy,8281
Salty pearls of sadness,8382
Ran from her eyes.8483
The bane of her beloved,8584
Could stand no more!8685
He opened the door,8786
For the first time,8887
Since the death,8988
Of his mate,9089
And the death,9190
Of her executioner.9291
The one,9392
This virgin,9493
So passionately cried for!9594
Gone,9695
But not forgotten,9796
In both of their hearts!9897
Still writhing in ecstasy,9998
From this Sato Masochist display,10099
Of lust and grief,101100
He floated,102101
Across,103102
The hallowed ground,104103
Touching down,105104
Just a few feet from, 106105
The foot of the grave.107106
He leaned forward,108107
Feet leaving the ground.109108
Slowly,110109
He lowered himself,111110
His body and cape,112111
Completely enshrouding her,113112
Until he could feel,114113
Her breath on his cheek.115114
He whispered his greeting,116115
A fell voice in the air.117116
She opened her eyes,118117
Nostrils flared,119118
Eyes opened wider,120119
But no scream came,121120
Only submission.122121
His blood gorged member,123122
Brushed against,124123
Her swollen mound,125124
Still hidden,126125
Beneath her dress,127126
And she moaned,128127
Still twitching,129128
From her self induced,130129
Ecstasy!131130
He slid his ice cold tongue,132131
Into her moist hot mouth,133132
And his cold black heart,134133
Warmed,135134
Just a bit.136135
He sliced the strings,137136
With his razor sharp nails,138137
And her bodice tumbled off her,139138
Exposing the beauty,140139
Of an hour glass waist,141140
And supple breasts,142141
That no man,143142
Had ever touched!144143
Slowly, 145144
He traced his tongue,146145
Down her,147146
Long inviting neck.148147
Down he went,149148
And goose bumps, 150149
Followed.151150
He danced, 152151
From breast, 153152
To Creamy white breast.154153
Nipples hard,155154
From one flick,156155
Of his intoxicating,157156
Tongue.158157
She moaned, 159158
And he swelled. 160159
He could wait no longer.161160
Pulling up her dress,162161
He slid,163162
His icy dagger of love,164163
Deep into her mound,165164
As he sunk,166165
The fangs of commitment,167166
Deep'168167
Into her lovely,169168
Long neck!170169
Reaching down,171170
With his razor sharp nails,172171
He pulled out,173172
Just long enough,174173
To bloody,175174
His throbbing,176175
Dagger of love.177176
And with his next thrust,178177
Gave her...179178
Immortality!180179
Wrapping his arms, 181180
Around her,182181
He left her neck,183182
And slipped his tongue,184183
Deep into her throat,185184
And her hips rose,186185
To meet his thrusts.187186
And then it happened.188187
She traced her tongue,189188
To the curve,190189
Of his neck,191190
And he felt,192191
Two sharp daggers,193192
Pierce his skin!194193
He screamed in ecstasy195194
As he freed,196195
His dead swimmers,197196
Covered in the blood,198197
Still pouring, 199198
From his member,200199
Consummating his marriage!201200
Tombstones in their eyes,202201
He carried his pale bride,203202
Across the threshold,204203
Of his mausoleum. 205204
A contest entry
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130 points, ended December 18, 2007, 23 entries
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Comments
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I have to say this is a definitely well written poem. It is sensual. It has lots of imagery in it. The word usage is wonderful and it flows extremely well. It is a great write. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering it into my contest. I also thought it very creative.
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i know it would almost seem crazy for me to say this, but it was beautiful, a new look at love. you know what i mean?
i loved the last three lines. it was the best way to end this poem. i really liked it, good job!
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Wow....
this was quite the write and i loved every moment of it! Kudos and thanks so much for your entry
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I loved this. Its that simple lol. The writing was very good, very fluid. I loved how you used the space to emphasize words or phrases. Also, this idea of a vampire's marriage is new and something that I haven't read much of at all. This is definitely an amazing write!
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i absolutely love the beginning, "funeral lilies" - such a great line. the whole poem has a very old feel to it and sets a time period which i like. for a long poem it did a great job at keeping my attention (not a poet). i especially love the description of the man having been so long from his earthly desires. the need is passionate and well focused.
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"Everything was in bloom,15
Including the virgins!16"
...Man those number things are annoying. I wish I could get rid of them when viewing stories. Um, anyway, I just wanted to point out that those two are awesome lines. Very clever, although I'm not sure about the exclaimation point. I think the words speak energetically enough for themselves.
"Of his dammed soul mate" - damned
"From this Sato Masochist display" - First: Sado, not Sato, so named after the Marquis de Sade.
Second: How is it sadomasochistic to masturabate in a cemetary? I mean, it's a bit morbid, but there's no pain/pleasure play. Of course, emotions are involved that might cause one pain, but still, it seems a strange word choice.
"A fell voice in the air" - fell? I'm not sure if I understand why you used that word. Does it have an alternative meaning than "to fall"?
"To Creamy white breast" - why is creamy capitalized?
"His icy dagger of love" - that sounds so utterly unpleasant. Like, the least erotic thing ever for the girl. Poor nun lady.
"His dead swimmers" - HAH! Awesome.
"He carried his pale bride,
Across the threshold,
Of his mausoleum. " - Heh, when I read this, I thought that this was the crappiest bridal suite that I've ever heard of.
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Nice job with this. At first I was like, poetry? Why poetry? But now I realize that the poetic format added another depth to an otherwise simple tale.
During the reading, I was very very strongly reminded of the song Nymphetamine by Cradle of Filth. If you have a chance, look up the lyrics. It's like you're both writing about the same situation. It's uncanny.
And now I totally want to go listen to that song again. Heh.
Good job.
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this is good. i like the creativity in it, and i like that you put it in poem format instead of paragraphs!
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