Winter-Dragon, By Chaz D. Wolf1
Winter-Dragon thou'st done2
Smote and ruin, vast undone3
Bonds of fire, malice, hate4
Always hunted tis your fate5
Fire, ash, slate and snow6
Farther, faster, swifter go7
No escape, O wretched fiend8
Ye shalt be chained to yonder beam9
These chains shall be you your reeking doom10
Here to stay no hope for you11
Thus, the yonder knight approaches 12
Blade held high, death encroaches 13
O that blade, malicious tool14
As it comes ever cruel 15
No escape, O wretched fiend16
Barred the way, treacherous beam! 17
A contest entry
- Another Amazing Poetry Contest by Melissa Loves Jeffy.
100 points, ended December 15, 2007, 20 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think of the imagery within the poem?
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This kind of poem isnt really what i asked for in my contest. Other then that point its a cool poem. Good job. Keep writing
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My Mistake i must of entered the wrong contest! lol!
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The same with this poem, it is very good but I think you should capitilize those O's,lol. There were a few other mistakes but I won't list them out right now. I love the Imagery.
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There I fixed those O's like you said. What were the other mistakes you saw? i would like to fix them and make it a better poem!
Thank you for your comment!
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I like it. I could totally see the vision in my mind. Great job!
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I like this one even more. A few points, however:
"Always hunted tis you fate"
Is this what you meant to say, or did you mean "your"?
"Winter-Dragon thou are done"
The "are" in this line seems out of place; I think you may want a more archaic form of are to keep the parallel wording.
A wonderful poem, though; the imagery is beautiful.
thank you.
annye
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