♥He Loves Her More♥

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She told him she didn't want to be nice anymore - she wanted to be 'evil' -so he went out and bought her a pair of devil horns. She wore them all day, and when people asked her why - she simply told them it was opposite day. ♥2

She told him she wanted to drink, so he went into the kitchen and poured her a glass of orange juice. He handed it to her and told her to drink it. She laughed at him, but drank it anyway. ♥3

She told him she wanted to get high, so he took her hand and dragged her to the car. He drove her up to the highest hill in town and set out a blanket. They laid under the stars, and she curled up against him. ♥4

She told him she wanted to be beautiful, so he took her to a dance room--and showed her herself in the mirrors. He let her sit in the center and play with make-up, but when she was done, he washed it all off and kissed her lips slowly. ♥5

She told him she wanted to cut herself, so he found a picture of her. He handed it to her with a pair of scissors, and told her, "Cut away." ♥6

She told him she wanted to cry in the rain, so he pulled out his old sprinkler. He let her sit in his backyard, under the sprinkler, and cry. After a few minutes, he went and sat with her. ♥7

She told him she wanted to jump off a cliff, so he took some money from his bank account and told her they were going on a roadtrip. He took her bungee jumping. ♥8

She told him she wanted someone to love her, so he paid a guy to write the words 'I love you, Britt' in the sky. She held his hand that summer afternoon as they took a walk in the park. He pointed up, whispering 'Surprise' and she cried, for joy. ♥9

She told him she wanted to kill herself, so he took her to his room. He signed on the computer, opened a game, and created a new character called 'Brittany', then he let her play until she died. ♥10

She told him she loved him more than anything, so he told her straight back that he loved her more. Then he gave her a hot kiss and let her hang onto him. ♥

Author notes

Okay, I was inspired by 'Scandalous Beauty' a poem written by Santas Daughter.

Link To Poem: http://storywrite.com/story/112443

ANYWAY,
hi people. thank you for all the great comments! and thanks to abba12 for spotlighting this story.




- for contest -
BANANA: Just 'cuz it's fun to spell and reminds me of monkeys. Besides, I love 'em.
I'm choosing the romance option and I know this isn't REALLY like a story - since there isn't any dialogue or anything, I just hope you enjoyed it anyway.

erica[♥]xoxo

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  • That was so adorable!
    Just..it was just about perfect! <333
    I don't even know what to say, it was just too cute! <333


  • Cupcake14
    April 5
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    No wonder it's so popular, the thing is written quite wittily, and is quite humorous. I like the guy here better than Prince Charming...or maybe he really is one. I would love it if my guy-when I get one, that is-would be like that.
    Is he based on your real boyfriend, or just a fantasy?

    • Hahah, thank you. And well, I don't have a boyfriend, nor did I at the time. But I found a smartass guy just like this. XD. We're best friends though.

      <3


  • Taylor Renee
    August 30, 2008
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    Oh my gosh. This is so sweet. I absolutely love it. Absolutely.

    He's like, the perfect guy, lol. But really.

    This is extraordinary. Beautiful.

    I love how you used the phrases; how he did it. It was wonderful.



    I really just loved it! It was sweet, romantic, and I can see why it was nominated.

    Congrads on that, and best of luck!

    xoxo
    -♥-
    Tay


  • I Dare to Dream
    August 30, 2008
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    Aww! So sweet!

    I read the poem you were inspired by, honestly, I like this one better. It's so much cuter, so much more romantic. Absolutely fantastic.

    Great job and good luck!

  • Ahava
    August 20, 2008

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    awwwwwes! this was sooooooo sweet. Like, sooooo sweet.
    adorable. I want a guy like this . you are a very good writer and I'm glad I got to read this. Good job!


  • miles of smiles
    August 7, 2008
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    Yay! You're in the SW Oscars...Best Romance Story! So proud!

    • always feel pretty
      August 20, 2008
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      Thank you soo much. *mutters that SW didn't send me a note saying you commented*

      Wish me luck. I'm gonna need it!

      erica)♥(xoxo


  • moonwriter
    July 29, 2008

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    That was adorable. You're a very good writer and the emotion, despite the short length, was awesome. This was just beauitful. Great job!


  • karmaxandxcrayons
    May 26, 2008
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    Oh my gosh!!! This is fabulous!! So so SO fabulous!! I cannot even express its fabulous-ness in words.... Just because I feel like this comment should have more in it than just blind adoration, I shall tell you WHY I love it so!! It was cute and with the beginning of each line I found myself trying to predict what the boy was going to do next....

    Great job!!

    <3

    Maureen.


  • damnxrightxitsxanna
    April 28, 2008

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    It was beautiful. I loved all those ideas the guy came up with just to make the girl happy. even though it might not eactly fit in the category of a story, it's beautiful... great job


    • always feel pretty
      April 28, 2008
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      Thanks. I know it doesn't technically count as a story, but anyway. I'm glad you liked it!

      ericaxoxo


  • Breathless Ballons
    April 11, 2008

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    Wow! This is fantastic.. you really showed how much he loved her. Most guys wouldn't do things like that for a girl. I hope I can find a guy as sweet as that! This was truly.....AMAZING!!!!!!!


  • DeadlyTurnip
    February 24, 2008

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    YAY

    This was sweet My favorite was the high one. I'm glad you got spotlighted, and thank you for the great read!


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    February 22, 2008

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    ♥ you sure love these little hearts ♥
    then again so do I
    anwyays I thought this to be an utter pleasure to read incased with the right amount of elements of romance and emotion and not to cliche for me...

    very well written
    ♥ Blair

    • always feel pretty
      February 22, 2008
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      Yes, I love those little hearts.
      ♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥♥
      And thank you sooo much! I'm really glad you liked it.

      erica♥xoxo!


  • xxmomoxxx
    February 22, 2008
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    that was so sweet! there aren't many guys out there like that, i can tell you!


  • lostdreamer189
    February 22, 2008

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    this was adorable! man what a nice guy..lol

    i love it


  • isaacoommen
    February 21, 2008
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    Very well written

    It's sweet but witty and clever. You're very gifted.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 4, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 5.


  • iPoopAThug
    February 21, 2008

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    Sweet

    This is one of those sweet things you expect to get in an email or something. Such great unconventional ways of giving the girl everything she asked for.


  • CrystalKitsune357
    February 20, 2008
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    That was so beautiful!!!!


  • vampirecutie669
    February 19, 2008

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    This is amazing. I almost cried as I read it. If only people in this world all cared like this for one another! love it!

  • miles of smiles
    February 19, 2008

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    holy snapples! did i really not comment on this?

    well.

    whatever.

    i'll just do it now.



    first off, erica, this is amazing. as usual. *sigh* you really showed us that he loved her, without being cliche. it was funny, and sweet, and although your vocabulary is rather simple, the way you weave your words together makes it beautiful all the same.

    the little details in this made it...i don't know the word. i would say cute, but it's not cute. it's beautiful. calling it cute would make me feel kind of guilty.

    i loved how you said "poured her a glass of orange juice" instead of...something like "poured her something to drink".

    my favorite [verse? stanza? paragraph?] is when he takes her into the dance room. it makes me think that she's like a little girl, playing with the makeup, wanting to look beautiful. everyone can relate to that. everyone wants to be beautiful.

    and that's what makes you such an amazing writer, erica. you let everyone know they're beautiful.

    ♥sarah

    p.s. i really can't believe i didn't comment on this.

    • always feel pretty
      February 19, 2008

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      I'm glad you did comment. They always make me smile like a mile long.

      I know, I'm in the everyone-needs-to-know-their-beautiful kind of mood. But it's only true!

      you know, sometimes I'm tempted to just tell you not to comment - i bet my ego's like HUGE thanks to you. ego, confidence, whatever it is. it's like wayyy too big for a shorty like me (i'm five'four" and probably won't grow anymore.)

      but you know what? i think about how much i love reading your comments and how they make me feel good about myself, and how they do give me the confidence i probably wouldn't have otherwise, and then i slap myself in the head and say, "Stop being an idiot, Erica!" And with that, I grin like a fool. Thing about you is that you can make people feel like they can do absolutely anything.

      erica♥xoxo

      • miles of smiles
        February 19, 2008
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        wellllll. your ego should be as big as...as........ummm.....my butt would be after i ate ben & jerry's every day for 100 1/2 days! 'cause your amazing. and that's that.


  • Im All Drama Queen
    February 18, 2008

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    well never mind i read it over again and i do like it soooooooooo munch well kepp up the grate work bye

  • Im All Drama Queen
    February 18, 2008
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    umm i dont know what to say i don't know if i like it or if hate it. let me think no i have ,y answer. okay i kind of like it but is is kinda well all over the place srry i dont like it


  • wolfgirl1
    February 18, 2008

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    This is a great, sweet story!It was funny how the guy found all those "safe" ways to show her he loved her.
    But that girl needs therapy or something.


  • Aaez
    February 18, 2008

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    AWWWWWWWWWW man!!!!!! thats so coool!!!! i lvove itt!!! its so great!!! i heart heart heart heart heart it!! its so great!!!! ...very creative
    do they have more than three appluase?:S

    • always feel pretty
      February 18, 2008
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      thank you soo much! I'm realy glad you liked it. and sadly, no they don't have more than three clappy men.

      thanks!
      erica♥xoxo


  • Fizbop
    February 18, 2008

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    A very creative and intresting way to write. This is very sweet and sincer I feel it's a very unique write. Keep it up


  • IntrepidFantasy Greeters member
    February 18, 2008

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    Awwww that was so romantic and sweet! I truly adored this. His love for her is so touching! Wow what I wouldn't give to have a love like that one. Beautiful!

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Kat222
    February 17, 2008
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    This was great. very well put together. a very touching love story


  • Prodigious.Mirth
    February 17, 2008
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    ♥ tHIS WAS ENCHANTING..... ♥

    vERY well Done

    Blair ♥


  • Mitsuki-Sakura
    February 17, 2008

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    oh my joe this is soo sweet.
    it sounds like one of those sweet chain letters that get passed around.
    in a good kind of way (because some people don't like chain emails.....)
    anyway it's sooo sweet.
    it's also so creative
    I love what you've done.
    Wish I could be this creative!
    Kudos!

  • broncotwister
    February 17, 2008

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    Bravo.

    This is a beautiful story, well-written, and absolutely delightful to read. It perfectly describes how I feel about my girl. My soul to God, my body to the Marine Corps, but my heart, forever hers. Bravo, and keep up the good work. Semper Fi.


  • Ghost of a Siren
    February 17, 2008
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    Awww this is so cute! I loved it, made me smile!


  • Blurith
    February 17, 2008
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    this was really creative, as all the negative energy was easily thwarted by positive imagination.


  • WyrdSister8131
    February 16, 2008
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    This was really beautiful and soooooo poetic. Thank you for making me smile.

  • abba12
    February 16, 2008
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    haha this is so sweet!!! We all need a man that will do this lol. And you're 14, so you've done really well. Great work, I love it!


    • always feel pretty
      February 16, 2008
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      thanks! actually I just turned fifteen this past Monday.

      i'm really glad you liked it

      erica♥xoxo

      • abba12
        February 16, 2008

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        heh I've been informed you're a friend of a good irl friend of mine, who has apparently just changed her screen name from J.P. Troy to wyrdsister, so its a small world! or a small site, whatever

        and happy birthday!


  • Peppermint star xxx
    December 24, 2007

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    definitly something worth reading.At first,i didn't understand the last part,but then i thought about it and said,"duh.".lol.i really liked the part about cutting the picture.i wish someone would say that kind of stuff to me <3.

    beginning: 4, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 2, characters: 4.

  • werner1221
    December 24, 2007

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    yay.

    good work here. im not sure what else to say about this other then its a fine little piece. nicely written and gives you a smile.

    gj.


    • always feel pretty
      December 25, 2007
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      thank you soo much. it means a lot to me that you enjoyed it.

      erica♥xoxo!

      ps.
      happy holidays!


  • Andy Stephenson gold member
    December 11, 2007

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    I Like This!

    He found creative ways of turning around her negative thoughts and energy. Very good job. It is nice to read something positive about the negatives. Thanks for entering my contest.

    Andy

  • lyricsfordummys1
    December 9, 2007
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    This is really cute. I liked it.


  • Blue-Eyed-Brunette
    December 6, 2007

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    Wow, this is cute for something different. I love how you changed around everything negative and made it a positive. Props to you both.


  • chowa16
    December 5, 2007
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    Its a good work of ar


  • UnicornGargoyle
    December 4, 2007
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    Loved it

    This was so sweet. You did a very good job putting it together

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.


  • DarkOneShadow
    December 4, 2007

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    This was great

    Took everything that was a sign that she was in trouble, and used it to show her some positive things out of it... very well done, play on words, but I liked it alot.

    DarkOne


  • Radiance
    November 30, 2007

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    OMG... This is so sweet and romantic and lovely and wonderful and I'm running out of adjectives so forgive me for rambling but this is the longest run-on sentence I have ever written and can't believe I'm still going! *takes enormous breath* Okay. Better now. This was gorgeous, and I would love if my future guy loved me this much. It's wonderful.

    • always feel pretty
      November 30, 2007
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      Thank you. And that's probably one of the longest run-on sentence I've ever read. Awesome though.

      thanks again
      erica♥xoxo!


  • Tsubasa
    November 30, 2007

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    AMAZING!!!

    I'm going to have to bookmark this- I don't even know what to really say. It was... beautiful. I'm kind of speechless right now. It was such a good story and thank you for writing it.

    Tsubasa


    • always feel pretty
      November 30, 2007
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      Thank you. I feel honoured that you're going to bookmark it.

      thanksagain,
      erica♥xoxo


  • I Dare to Dream
    November 30, 2007

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    YAY! This was so sweet, and sooo romantic, it's amazing! I wish it could've been longer, but still, wow!

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