Letters To You

Dear Edward, 1

Today has been a boringly normal day. The sun is shining, the birds are singing and if you listen carefully you can hear children playing in the park down the road. Do you remember the first time we met, Edward? It was just in that tiny park, I was on a swing and you offered to push me. I smiled and said ok. From that moment on we were inseperable. I remember it clearly. It wasn't a particularily nice day, a little cloudy, and I was wandering about on my own. I had had an argument with my mother earlier on and I was just trying to clear my anger. Looking back it seems to be a really silly, insignificant argument. But anyway, I climbed over the tiny fence into the park and mooched over to the baby swings. I remember scowling to myself, when this shadow stood over me. 2

"Hello." It simply said. 3

"Hello." I said back. 4

"Would you like a push?" You grinned.5

I smiled and nodded. You went behind me and started to gently push the swing, backwards and forwards. With each rising push I felt my anger drain away. 6

After a while you stopped. You came and sat on the swing next to me, and looking me straight in the eyes asked for my name. 7

"Lizzie, or Elizabeth, whatever you prefer."8

"Elizabeth is a beautiful name....for a beautiful girl." You replied.9

I blushed wildly and you said, "My name is Edward."10

"Hello Edward." I grinned, forcing myself to look up at you. You had thick, dark hair and gentle brown eyes ,which gazed intently into my blue ones. You asked what I was doing on my own and I told you. I felt as if I could tell you anything and everything. You asked me if I would like to accompany you on a stroll down the larger park and I agreed. 11

Oh Edward, I remember that day so clearly, and go through it over and over in my mind, trying to recapture the moment. I miss you so much and long for you to be here with me. 12

You walked me home after spending the day together. Just you and me. It may have seemed a little rushed after only just meeting but it felt right to me. 13

You walked me right to my door and said goodbye like a proper gentleman. Instead of grabbing me for a kiss you simply took my right hand and kissed it. That became our little ritual didn't it? Whenever we parted, be it for the night, or a few moments, you always kissed my right hand. I think that was the most romantic thing that had ever happened to me. 14

All that night I lay awake dreaming of you. You had totally captured me and I could not wait to meet you the next day. 15

You turned up bright and early, holding a small bunch of flowers in your hand. I still have those flowers and when I feel sad I go and look at them, they stil have a faint scent to them. That day we held hands. 16

It was the same the next day, and the next. It was not until we had been going out for at least a week before we had our first kiss. It was magical. It was in the park again, one of our favourite places, and the sun was slowly setting. You turned to me, cupped my chin in your hand and placed your soft lips onto mine. It was a slow, unhurried kiss, full of passion, filled with sweetness and first love. We broke off after a few seconds as I had to go home. Edward, that was the first time I had ever kissed anyone, and I think you knew. 17

For a whole year we were together, just us, and no-one else. We told eachother we loved eachother every single day. I didn't need or want anyone else, only you. Edward, I miss you and need you. Why did you do it? I was ok, it was only a slight cough I had. You insisted on coming round that night, in the dark, in the rain. 18

I just hope that you never knew a thing as that car skidded right into your path. It happened so quickly that there was no chance for you to get out of the way. I just hope you felt no pain. When the man got out of the car he said that he heard you murmuring, Elizabeth over and over again. Oh Edward. 19

When they got you to hospital it was too late. But they were surprised at how they were very few cuts and bruises. It did not look as if there were anything wrong with you at all. But it was internal the Doctor said to me as I sobbed. 20

I did not look at you as you lay in the hospital as I wanted to remember the good times and how perfect you were. 21

This letter is true from the heart Edward. I want you to know, as you always did, that I love you truly and always will. You are my first and last love. 22

Love your Elizabeth xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx23

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  • moonwriter
    July 30, 2008

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    I've read this before and I still like it. It's very cute and very sweet. Beautifully written and a pleasure to read. Good job!


  • zoralielda
    July 17, 2008
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    I like this.
    It's beautiful!


  • Bree Birichino 23
    July 6, 2008

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    i really liked this
    you caught teh right words and perfect emotion
    keep up teh great writing
    good lukc in teh contest!


  • potaytee
    June 11, 2008

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    That is a really good letter. I sense the feeling of nostalgia the whole way through. I love how you told through the letter. Well done and good luck for my contest


  • NinjaMegami
    May 12, 2008
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    aw...


  • Baisi
    May 11, 2008

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    Oh! I've come acrossed this story before! I adore the description, the name Edward, and I love the feeling in it.


  • tallblondie gold member
    May 2, 2008

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    A cute vignette of love snatched away in a moment by death. Regarding the contest, though suitably emotive (the subject matter more than anything else), the decriptive language employed was rather ordinary.

    Thank you for your entry and good luck!


  • Miss Belligerence
    April 26, 2008

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    This was sweet, I liked a lot of your imagery and such and there is a lot of emotion in it but it was kind of predictable. I would also tone down on the 'oh edward's' because that gave it a kind of cheap, soap opera air, but that was the only part I didn't care for.
    great write
    thanks for entering
    -gibson


  • Starlight-Kisses
    April 21, 2008

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    omg this was a really good piece i liked it anothert car accident though man thats how the guy in the last story died it's popular but this was a really good story well done and dogs nice well anyways good luck

  • Xabstruse
    April 17, 2008

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    Wha the..I thought I commented on this? Well, I guess not. Excellent write; I loved the emotions in this, so raw. Wonderful. I could have sworn I almost cried, but I didnt.

    Great write, thanks for entering.


  • Jenni-Wren
    April 14, 2008

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    Aww. That was so cute! The emotions in this piece are so raw and beautiful. You had me in tears. Well done!
    And thank you for entering the contest.

  • mysterydragon
    March 31, 2008

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    that had such a romantic beginning. there are so many great details and memories in here. very cute.


  • not done baking
    March 25, 2008

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    This was nice, I think that it really could have been drawn out more though. I think with just more detail and events in it I could have cared for the character more, I like the idea of the story being told from a letter, but I felt like it was lacking something. It's a great start, but I definitely think there's room for expansion. The grammar and spelling was very good, although "eachother" is "each other" but I completely understand that, it sounds like it should be one word.

    beginning: 5, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • IxLovexElphiex
    March 25, 2008

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    loved it from the moment it said EDWARD!!!
    this was so sweet and the emotion is beautiful. just my kind of story.
    but so sad!
    very nice job.


  • checkmate-
    March 25, 2008

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    This is so, soo good. I love the emotion. This is very well proofread, I could find no spelling errors or grammar problems, especially as this is a letter. Good luck, thanks for entering, and keep writing!


  • HopelesslyInLove
    March 25, 2008

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    Awww..

    This was so cute and sweet, but sad as well. Awww... I love how romantic Edward is at the park with the swings and everything, it sounds like he knows how to sweep a girl off her feet! Very sad at the end though, you nearly made me cry! I could feel the powerful emotion in this, very well done!
    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    *KAT*


  • tabbykat92
    March 11, 2008
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    This was very sweet but sad at the same time time. Thanks and good luck in the contest.


  • lovableReese
    March 4, 2008

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    This was very nice. I liked it a lot. I felt the pain for her when Edward was hit. This was short but good. Good Job. And good luck in the contest.


  • Crying Angel Eyes
    February 28, 2008
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    Brava i got a little teary eyed at the end. this was perfect i love it thanks for entering it


  • Ninja Bubble
    January 26, 2008

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    Emotionful! Loved! IT! To! Bits! It definitely packs a punch of emotion in this one, I wanted to cry! It made me feel special, because you used 2nd person I felt like I had done all those things! Awesome!


  • BrokenDawn
    January 16, 2008

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    OMG that was so sad i was getting teary! i loved it its so sweet and wonderful! Bravo!
    Goodluck!
    ~dawn♥


  • This Will Hurt
    January 15, 2008
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    This was so beautiful! I loved the description and it definitely was heart-wrenching. Thank you so much for entering. I would write more, but I'm in a hurry to get off the computer before my mom comes home. Good luck! ^.^


  • stardust3492
    January 11, 2008
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    Great job. I like how you wrote it in letter format. It is very touching. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • Greeneyes15
    November 28, 2007

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    GoodJob!

    this is a very enjoyable peice. i felt that there was a lot of emotion there, but it was expressed in a very simple way which i thought fit perfect. i liked this very much. great job! keep up the good writing!

    peace&love,
    greeneyes


  • darkangel7567
    November 28, 2007
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    amazing

    it actually made me cry and it takes alot to do that. i really loved it.

  • This Will Hurt
    November 28, 2007
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    i like it!

    This was a very emotional peice, (though it takes aa lot these days to make me cry), and I look forward to your other stories! Maybe if you revise this it'll sound a little better though... but that's the only problem I had with this!


  • FeatherTrail
    November 28, 2007
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    sweet

    This was a very sad and sweet first love story...touching...


  • Silenced Tears
    November 28, 2007

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    Wow. I didn't know that much... It's so emotional. I hope... You write something to back this up. I feel like there's something missing. Questions unanswered.


  • DarkOneShadow
    November 28, 2007

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    Wow... that sucks

    Talk about tragic romance... that could make anyone turn away from love... simply powerful, Empress, well done.

    DarkOne

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