It wasn't until middle school that I had accepted Jason being my twin brother. 1
You see Jason wasnt the kind of guy that people would want as their brother, even as a friend. There was nothing wrong with him but people thought that he was weird and strange because others had labelled him EMO. 2
I had always denied Jason of being my brother, even before he became labelled as the "EMO KID" There was just something about him that peeved me off. Every word he said, every look he gave, every time he touched, and every heart he broke, it just didnt seem like it was real. 3
Ever since grade 4 till now we havent been as close, before grade 4, we used to do everything together. We would hug in public, sometimes even kiss (on the cheek) if i was down he would make me happy with just one touch, one look, one word but now whenever he does these things its as if he's dead inside.4
I've always blamed my parents and friends that he is this way, never myself because i could never hurt him..5
Could I?6
Well yea I can hurt him, and I did. I denied him for who he really was, every one else called him "EMO" and other names that cut him, (not on the outside but on the inside, not with a knife but with love) I knew Jason better than any of them, and I treated him worse than any of them, now when I need him, he is not there.7
He is alive, but dead inside.8
He loves me, I can feel it.9
I have left a whole in myself though because he is gone and it is my fault. 10
I never realized it until now but all these years I was getting labelled aswell, Jason is my own flesh and blood, We are one that have been broken into two because there was so much of us and our love to give, we had to be broken off into two.11
I love you Jason.. No matter what I say. Or what others yell. Look deep inside yourself and there I will be. 12
Not right beside or watching your back.13
But right there with you all the time through rain and shine.14
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AUTHOR NOTES..16
Just so you know this is not a real story, we are not actual twins, nor is he my brother, just a friend but none of this is true, I just used his name. And yea, I dont really have a plan when I write I write what comes to me and this came to me, so I wrote it. Hope you like it. Sorry if it doesnt have a plot to it. But yea. Luv Caz xx xx xx17
P.S. I love boys, they are awsum, And if any shall drop dead.. drop dead who you are, not for what you were or what you want/became.18
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- About Twins [Because Taylor Has Problems] by Taylor Renee.
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Comments
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I really love this!
Who cares about that grammer stuff? It could be fixed in a minute
I love what this deals with, and thje way you wrote it. It seemed like, almost a confession to herself to me, too, but maybe you intended that? If not, it's still really good!
I love how intense this is, and it's like, sad with a light at the end of the tunnel I love that!
Thank you so much for entering, and good luck!!!
xoxo
Tay
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What I really like about this is how, despite your admition that it's fictitious, you've dealed with alot of real issues. Primarily the issue of how labels can affect people's attitudes but there's also the whole idea that we never want to see ourselves as hurting those that are close to you.
I love how your character realises that they've done wrong and wants to change it. Maybe I'm misreading the last section wrong but there's the feeling that your character is speaking to themselves, perhaps still too afraid to tell Jason.
And now for the criticism. In a couple of places you should change "i" to "I" That wasn't too painful now, was it?
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