Has there ever been a time when you have sat aimlessly, staring out the window, seen the sun set, and wonder what am I doing here? You stare into either a picture perfect sunset or a trashy neighborhood and wondered, am I not ment for more than this? There comes a point in everyones life when we realize we are not content. For some the want of more things,materialism,controls thier thoughts, and for other the sense of longing fills them. The longing to see a total and different land where beauty is not inhibited by a highway or a towering skyscraper, and a time or culture that focuses on more important things then money, sucess and power. Have you ever read a book, seen a movie, or heard a song that instills a hope in you that sometime mear life can give you the same happy, hopeful and peaceful feeling? It is the way of us humans to not be content, but it is also our way to search for the solution to the gap that that causes us. Will you fill the gap with money, things, God, friends, by creating something, or will sit by and let the feeling knaw at your soul. The choice is yours.
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I am of the female gender and my favorite book is
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Some worthy ideas but...
First...be consistent in your "voice"...and POV. (Point of view) You've got a "you" and then and "I" in your piece...which is it?
Second...(just a little advice) have a little patience. Very few people your age are "content"...in fact, unfortunately, very few people of ANY age are..."content." That's why we have change...and progress. It's the way of this world.
Your line that begins with "For some..." dealing with wants...also mentions longing. The two are not mutually exclusive. I'm not sure you are being clear in expressing what it is you seem to wish to say. Slow down. Don't cram all your ideas into one sentence or even one paragraph. BTW...you can use a colon (
after "fills them." Basically, it merely seems you want to travel...and wander the "wide-open spaces!" Why couch this with your rationalizations of "beauty"... "more IMPORTANT things"..."too many highways"..."big bad skyscrapers!" You're not the first kid to take this tack. And I'm willing to bet you too, alas, will be chasing your ogres of "money, success, power!" SOON!
Incidentally, "the solution TO the gap that that causes us" is quite a mouthful. Read it over...it doesn't quite make sense. What "gap?" I think you have the wrong word. Don't take such a preachy,ponticicating, lofty tone. Essentially, you are speaking to YOUR OWN goals here. Step back, read it over...put it away for a while to be re-read in a few years. You'll see what I mean. Meanwhile, slow down, take it easy.
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This is very true.
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