death story: a girl.

there once was a girl. she was a very lonely girl. a girl who screamed, a girl who was depressed, a girl who was murdered.1

i take you back two years ago..........2

stacy was a girl who never went to school, she did everything she was asked to do, and she still was denied the only thing she wanted, love from her father. she had a friend, maggie. they were next door niebghors and maggie had been there for her since her mother had died 8 years ago. stacy was ten. so was maggie.3

stacy was poor, she didn't have much. she was constantly abused by her father in every way imagineable. one night it was taken to far. stacy was murdered. her father was an obbsessive drinker and he always brought women into the house.. he occassionally did drugs, and he had done alot of both the night stacy was murdered.4

he came home completely stoned and drunk, stacy thought he was on the verge of passing out, beacuse he kept knocking into things and stumbling. but when he looked at her she was so overcome with a feeling of dread she thought she would pass out from the intensity of it. he made straight for stacy and tried to pin her to the floor, but she kicked him between the legs so hard he groaned loudly and fell over the coffee table. stacy made towards the stairs hoping to get to her room, but she slipped about half way up from running so fast and fell back down the stairs. she screamed because she felt something snap in her ankle from the way it had gotten twisted under her.5

the pain was so intense she knew she couldnt make it up the stairs.6

so she tried getting up and going straight to the door. but unknown to her her father had gotten up and ran across the hall to the kitchen and when she passed by it he hit her over the head so hard she was knocked over against the opposite wall. she felt she was near passing out. but stacy's father had other plans. he grabbed her by the back of the neck and threw her at the table directly across the hall. it hit her in the stomach so she was short of breath for several seconds. her father came up behind her pinning her to the table. she was now bending over it with it squished into her stomach, she couldn't catch her breathe. he tore of her pants and underwear, and also removed his own. he penatrated stacy with all the force he could muster, she was praying to god as she had done before for it to end quickly. but he kept on thrusting into her so hard she was sore after several minutes. she cryed so loud and hard that he yelled at her and said "why dont you like huh, well i geuss you're just looking for more ain't ya honey". he threw her to the ground and she landed on her stomach.7

he pulled her up onto her knees and began thrusting into her again and again.8

but after a few minutes stacy gathered up the strength to kick him hard where she had just minutes before. she ran to the counter and grabbed a knife ready to stab him if he dared come near her. she didn't know her father had a gun hidden in his back pocket. he rolled his eyes at her as if saying bring it on girl. she ran towards him ready to make him suffer for what she had just been through, but quicker than her he pulled out the gun and shot stacy.9

she stopped shocked beyond belief at what happened, she looked at the blood pouring from the open wound on her chest and fell to the floor. her life flashing before her eyes as she went to join her mother in heaven.10

they found her father in mexico several days later and sentenced him to life in prison. maggie has went to stacy's grave everyday since she was buried, she will miss her forever. she is gone yes but will always be loved.maybe stacy can be happy now.11

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  • Wickedly
    May 18, 2005
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    Well, you need to work on the grammar and stuff, but I'm sure you already know that and just haven't gotten to it yet.

    Somethings you might want to re-look at in the story are that if she hurt her ankle how can she run? Also if he's penetrating her how can she kick him in the goin? Oh, and like Diamond said you could explain more about Maggie.

    You did a good job with this story and I liked the raw emotion. I could feel the heartbreak and sadness from this. Maybe its Maggie who's the narrator of this story?

  • AngelOfMusic44
    October 13, 2004
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    yes this is fictional. thanx for the tip i will consider it.

  • Diamond2007
    October 12, 2004
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    wow I hope this is a fictional story... so powerful. All I have to say one thing you could improve on is who is maggie? that would be a good thing to tell. anyways great write. Keep Writting