There was that one day
You made the tears from my eyes
you swallowed me hole
confessed me with lies
I held your tender heart
your dying apathy
where the fuck did our friendship go1
well is this where we stand
Cause these past few days I have not stopped
I have cried
well this is not where we are
this would not take me far
living in your death
maybe turn the switch of
cause the past hours I have nothing left
I have cried2
Fantastic now you leave me alone
with bitterness from deep within your clone
What happened to the boy that I once knew
every part of his that made me glow
What happened to my closest best friend
Now I feel like I am living a lie3
well is this where we stand
Cause these past few days I have not stopped
I have died
well this is NOT where we are
this would not take me far
living in your death
maybe turn the switch of
cause the past hours I have nothing left
I have died4
I just want you gone
I cant bare to feel
where my old love lies
you secrets peeled
like rose and thorn
you cut me deep
with no good byes
No kiss to keep
I don't know how bad to make it
I don't know how just to take it
I need to feel you deep inside my heart5
well is this where we stand
Cause these past few days I have not stopped
I have bleed to death
well this is NOT where we are
this would not take me far
living in your death
maybe turn the switch of
cause the past hours I have nothing left
I have lost my breath
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Honest OPINIONS
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Fantastic job. Just the thought of losing a friend to death is so very painful. You expressed the emotions so well. *wipes tears from my eyes*
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Losing a friend tis very painful indeed...or was this a lover who twas also a friend, I wonder...at any rate good job expressing the pain.
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I'm trying to figure out which character this applies to. It can't be Chris, because we haven't read of anyone close to him like that. It could be Reidy, but then who did she have such a good yet bad relationship with? I'm not so sure that Kerry made her think like that. Or...did he?
Since this poem is in The Apparition Man list, I assumed it was related to the novel. But disregard this comment if it's not xD
It really is a well written poem. I enjoyed reading it
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Jesus, this is a change of direction from previous chapters. The emotion and language in this brought a genuine tear to my eye. Nothing else has to be said for this. Pure Brilliance at work!
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Wow.
Your emotions are so precise, and sharp, and deep...like-sorry for the over-used comparison-a quick stab to the heart. Deep enough to make you feel, but not enough to totally kill you. You're just so good with describing everything!!!
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lady
Oh my I remeber this..lol I accidenl out it in this folder list thingy..
every poem I write my heart and soul go into it and that moment of my life stops completly absorbed in the emotions and the felings.. I am glad you are enjoying my descriptive nature...
thank you lovely
love blair ^-^
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Wow Babey Girl Very deep and you have expressed what you were feeling very very well
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Mum
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Emotions...
Uhh such sadness..wanna make me cry lol But yep definately...its...well done really the way u captured the way how you feel and everything...simply perfect....
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Great rhyming!!!
I loved the emotions and deph of this poem!!! It was truly magnificent. I really liked the flow and words you used, and the feelings that one can get from this piece. Overall, excellent work!
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Nice wording
That was awesome, full of emotion and loss.. excellent write. Loved the flow of the poem.
DarkOne
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