Chapter Three- Part Nine #1
Inside the car, I faced out the window, ignoring my mother. I was to be packed by tomorrow, and by this time , Tuesday I would be locked behind bars in a mental prison, back to were this while thing started from. I had not even tried beginning to beg or plead sanity, I knew nothing I could say could convince anyone. Not my Mum, not the doctors and not even myself. 2
I felt safe with that label though, like somehow I knew I was coming back to Kerry, even if I did dread to relive those memories. I knew at least I would be at out home, where we did belong in some ways. Though now it was more like some twisted bitter punishment now that he was gone. I was sure that this was her plan all along, my mother, to make me see that he wasn't really there anymore, that he was really gone, but I knew better than that.3
I had plans though, oh how I had big plans for this vacation of mine. Like this was some sort of unplanned vacation, One I did not have a lot of time to ponder over and plan, but I did plan to think it over, reevaluating things, setting them into action, and there was one thing that was for certain, I wanted Kerry's old room. I was adamant about that.4
My mother though, cynical as she was, did not see this as a good idea at all, but I worked my way around that, fake tears were my forte. My Mother, I knew was not one for crying, she hated it, it dug deep into her emotions. So I would put on an act, an keep the tears streaming down my face, until I got my way or until she gave in. she was so gullible, it was kind of sad and pathetic, to think that she could be fooled so easily, but that was something I had picked up from my Dad.5
He was a great actor, maybe to good of an actor to care about us, but hell he was an actor and a great one at that, and I was glad that at least I ad been passed down, one useful gene from my parents, and one day in heaven, I would take Kerry to one of my Dads Broadway performances. I would get him front row tickets, the best seats in town, and what a show that would be. I would be so proud for my dad to meet Kerry, if he hadn't already met him that was.6
Outside the car it rained in buckets, pouring down, filling the streets. It was depressing and dreary, it was just the way I liked it, enough to fill be up with god damn awful, morbid thoughts.7
"What are you thinking about Reidy," My mother asked as we pulled up into the driveway.8
I didn't face her, I just continued to look out the window.9
"You know you can't ignore me forever Reidy, sooner of later honey you're gonna have to face me, you can't hide from me."10
I turned to face her, bored and frustrated with her issues. "I will do whatever the hell I please with the last few hours of my life."11
My Mother sighed, "Which is the reason your going to the clinic Reidy, you and your faceless suicidal threats, I can't handle you on my own, I won't even try, because your not even attempting to try yourself, which is why I have no other option, you need to be with people that know how to deal with you, that you can talk to that and that can help you."12
I laughed, grabbing the door handle as she parked the car, " Again with the , Reidy needs help scheme, can't you see that would have never have needed anyone's help, if you just had of let me die in peace."13
I opened the car door, sliding out and slammed it shut behind me, walking around the back of the house. I heard my mother slam the car door behind her, and she followed behind me.14
"Your going to stop this Reidy, do you hear me, you are not going to die, I won't let you, and if I have to keep you by my side with a lock and key, there is nothing stopping me, cause you can bet my dear I will."15
I stepped inside the house, walking through the kitchen and into my room. "Yeah well you do that, but you can't look after me like a retard, especially when I am not here, can you Mother, it will be totally out of you're control, just like last time if you remember."16
I shut my door, snickering at her stupid idea's. Watching me like a hawk, baby sitting me, she might as well bring out the handcuffs, while she was at it, and chain us together, that way there could be no possible way I could try another attempt. Not that I was planning to anyway, No way, because that would spoil my plans and spill the fun of that long awaited day when eternity was mine.17
I heard my mother outside my door, she opened it, throwing my bag on the floor , not even looking at me. Good I thought, maybe she could finally see that I had, had enough of her belittling my diseased lover.18
"What would you like for dinner tonight?," she asked, fiddling with the door handle. 19
I was rather hungry, I had to give her that, and she knew it by the way my stomach was grumbling in the hospital. I pondered her question knowing that it would probably be the last time I would get a chance to enjoy the pleasures of heart attack junk food. Hay maybe I could even eat enough to block that void in my heart.20
"I will have some fried chicken and chips," I said, switching my computer on.21
"Very well I will come and get you when I get back from ordering okay."22
"What so your just gonna leave me here all alone."23
That sparked an interest in her eyes, "Well you could always come for a drive if you want to love."24
I shook my head, "I didn't mean it like that, I meant so your just gonna leave me here all alone in this house with pointy and sharp objects, or with a bathroom cabinet full of pills."25
My homepage flashed up, Kerry's face as my wall paper. 26
She turned away, "I trust you enough that you won't do anything stupid to further the situation."27
I shrugged me shoulders, my smile remained on my face, "Sorry can't promise you that."
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A nice touch.
The tension seems to be an unecessary part of the overall story, since the relationship between the characters is already established. Good dialogue, but I would have liked to have seen the action move more into ideas about the surroundings, the wishes of Reidy, the food, and so on. I would like the events of the story to quicken at this point. Bringing the spirit of Kerry into it is a nice touch. There's definitely a lull in the tone of the work here in parts (a good thing).
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In the beginning, I thought she was going straight to the institution. When you mentioned going to the back of the house, I realized she was just going home. It didn't seem like it, though.
Her mother's getting nicer...it's scaring me
Is she trying to be all loving before she banishes her daughter to live in an institution?
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Just a tad confused here...
...I was sure she was going straight from the hospital to the institution and it took a while to understand that was not the case, that she was going home with her mother.
You wrote the mother as overbearing to begin with, I think, but now, she seems to be a very concerned and loving mother, wanting to do the best for her daughter and meeting resistance at every turn.
Reidy is a bit of a stubborn shit, is she not? Grins, a little self portrait here, early in your story as you noted and you are just feeling around for the character?
Story moves right along, even if I am a little slow in picking up on things, happy to see you still have such a loyal group of readers and those who comment.
Good on you!
regards...
Amicus...
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Well, back with Reidy again and I have to say that the way she treats her mother is terrible. She is so blindingly determined to get back to her dead lover that she is willing to sacrifice all that waits for her on this earth to do it.
The character is brilliantly realised and the plot is as strong as steel. I am loving this. Keep it up. 84 chapters suddenly doesn't seem so long!
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With all of your series to this, each brings that piece of element of which lures the reader into wanting more than the normal. Very strong plot and turning point -
This is great!!
~goal for today~
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Reidy's personality is definitely prominent in this story, it stands out...and you can tell when she talks, how she acts. I think you know your characters very well and the relationships they have with all the other characters. Very amazingly written...you have such a great talent!
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lady ^_^
well at this stage I kind of did and didnt feel my characters it was the baby stage and I was testing the waters..
I had no plan no idea and I just write so I am glad to see that I have established the characters well so early into the novel...
Thank you for reading, supporting me and commenting and also the applause- it is very gratiftying
love blair ~
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Love makes people do crazy things and Reidy has shown this. Also she did warn her mother bout leaving her alone so if she does die it is her mothers fault. Haha her mother sounds like mine when I attempted suscide. Dont they understand anything..nope guess not. This is getting great. Keep it up!
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Yeah, this is getting better
Reidy is really a person seeking her lost love and forced to live.... pure drama and it's so good...
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Some of the misspelled words distracted me a little bit from the story, but as usual in your writing, the plot of the story is really interesting and gripping.
Reidy's character is so convoluted, but I really like that about her. The dialogue was pretty good, although, the mother's speech sounded a little stilted at times. It kind of worked for her character though.
I found it very intersting that Kerry was apparently in the mental hospital before. I love the way we always learn more little bits and pieces about Kerry through Reidy's thoughts. It's very interesting getting to know him.
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