The Sky is Crying

My tightly clenched fist pounded on the wooden table, my documents and even my computer monitor shook under the impact. On the shaking monitor the black words blurred before my eyes, maybe because I was shaking in fury or the computer was moving. I knew one thing for certain; my most beloved brother who had been fighting in Iraq was gone. 1

Thoughts spun in my head thoughts like, "I just saw him alive at Christmas," and "No, no, this isn't right!”2

Glancing down I saw my trembling fists, with a scream I reached out and punched the wall. Sobs tore from my body; tears fell like the raindrops from the sky. I felt no pain coming from the hand that had swung from the wall; all the pain was coming from my shattered heart. 3

"God, no," was all I could mumble out. My strong walls crumbled down, they fell in shambles around my feet. As if to remind me of my loss rain began to pour from the sky.4

“The sky is crying,” tears fell, I gripped my sides and stared out into the rain, the message on my screen was permanently burning into my mind.

Author notes

A little tribute to the people at home receiving the terrible news that one of their beloved relatives or friends has been killed.

I'm a FEMALE! :D (I'm often mistaken for a male, does my female side not show enough? Must I add pink glitter? Or maybe they will mistaken my for a guy with weird hobbies...off topic...)

My favorite book would have to be Trickster's Choice by Tamora Pierce.

I think I went one sentence over the limit, is that still OK?

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  • KaiBailey
    December 16, 2007

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    Very Powerful

    This is a very powerful peice. I think that in the first paragraph, it might make it more effective if you perhaps described the facial expression.

    This came out very well!


    • perfect paradox
      December 16, 2007
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      :3 Thank you! I have to be careful about going over the 10 sentence limit though. I'll go back and edit some fluff and try to add in more facial expression!

      Thanks for your honost comment!


  • karmaxandxcrayons
    November 28, 2007
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    very short and yet it still skillfully evokes emotion. nice!
    xoxox,
    Maureen


    • perfect paradox
      November 28, 2007
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      Thankies! I had a limit of 1-10 sentense. Oh the horror! It's hard to write that short of a story!