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He counted the mile markers along the interstate to relieve the boredom of the long drive. It somehow seemed funny that he could be bored, knowing that in a few hours he’d be dead.

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  • Bitter Irony
    November 30, 2007

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    Wow! Excellent opening. Short and to the point, but already you've worked in some details of character. Nice work!

    Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!

    ~Bitter Irony