In The Fast Lane-Chapter 3

McCorman technical headquarters and garage was buzzing with life though it was only 8am. The hum of the coffee machines had accelerated into a roar almost as load as the engines being tested on the track due to the demand for caffeine from the half asleep engineers. All except for Alexia, fresh faced and raring to go, her shoulder length dark brown hair pulled into a flawless pony-tail, her sexy curves emphasized by a McCorman tank top that clung to her boobs and low-waisted combats that revealed the top of a blue thong. Sitting over a small desk in the garage she worked on some specifications for the newest edition to the McCorman F1 car family. She was too engrossed in her work to notice the tall shadow of Louis Carl Nurmi,the first ever Afro-Caribbean F1 driver and the newest driver on the McCorman team. His chocolate-honey brown skin embraced the sun streaming into the garage. His muscular arms boasted his intense work out schedule and his Cadbury* stomach was emphasized by a very tight black t-shirt. His brawny legs were cruelly hidden beneath the thick fabric of his McCorman racing suit bottoms. His sexy hazel eyes were fixed on Alexia who didn't notice this vision of male perfection until he coughed loudly. Alexia looked straight ahead and realizing that she was staring directly at his crotch looked straight into his eyes and felt her insides turn to mush. 1

'Hi, you must be the newbie. I'm Louis' he extended his long athletic arm.
'Urnghghm hi. I'm urm err Alexia' she flustered and grasping his hand and shaking it vigorously. After an awkward 30 seconds of Alexia cursing herself, Louis leaned over her shoulder his sweet musky after-shave within sniffing distance and began to examine her work.
'Is this the car I'm gonna be driving next Grand Prix?' God his voice was deep, and yummy and perfect and gorgeous and oooh like sex for the ears.
'Urm I hope so, I mean I think so, I mean..' crap. Gosh he was so close to her right now it was a struggle not to rest her head on his chest.
'Its very good. Just I think it should be a bit more... streamlined' he said as he ran his finger down the body of the sketch. 'The extra extension would definitely be a benefit.' “Did he say tension, oh God” Once again Alexia's body gave her away, her nipples had hardened so many times in the past 36 hours she was sure they would permanently stick out of her top. She nodded not trusting herself to speak.
'Well Ima hit the track now. Catchya later...Alexia' he said as he flashed her a seductive smile and walked out of the garage.
'Oooofff' Alexia exhaled and continued with her annotations and sketches.2


At about 4pm Alonso strolled in looking adorable his hair tousled and a blue top that accentuated the brown of his eyes perfectly. Alexia was talking to one of the engineers and Alonso discreetly slapped her bum and ran his finger up her back.
'Hi Tom,' he said to the engineer who nodded in response. 'Hello Alexia,' he said almost flippantly whilst looking up her long legs very slowly.
'Hey,' she replied just as casually.
'What are you two working on,' inquired Alonso leaning lightly on Alexia but directing the question at Tom.
'Oh we're just working on some improvements on Louis' new car,' Alexia said pointedly noticing the smirk on Alonso's face vanish immediately. It had only been one day and already Alonso's cockiness was getting on her nerves. She knew how much he loathed Louis and she thought some light teasing might just deflate his ego a bit.
'Nice.' Alonso muttered through closed lips. 'Mind of I have a word with Alexia for a moment Tom?' Tom nodded again and left. “Did that man ever talk” thought Alonso. Tom was somewhat of a genius and made about as much money as the drivers but he was far more important. Earning a degree in engineering at only 20 years old, he was quickly snapped up by McCorman who saw his endless potential and fed his massive brain with cars and mechanics. Now at 27, there was no one on the industry more qualified and well known as Tom Gareth. Not a week went by with at least 10 offers of at least £34 mill to buy Tom off McCorman and each one went in the shredder. And for all his knowledge and the 5 years that Alonso had been on the McCorman team he had heard Tom say two words, 'Two sugars' in response to how he liked his coffee. Already he was at a work bench with his head in a book and penciling drawings on a piece of paper.3

After diverting his attention from Tom to Alex he said 'So about dinner tonight...'
'Yes' said Alexia trying not to look into his gorgeous eyes.
'I was thinking maybe you could come to my place I have something rather...special planned.' Alexia felt a tingle run up her spine. There was something about that accent. He could say anything and her mind and body would respond as if he'd said 'let me tie you up and whip you.'
'I thought we were having a test drive.'
Alonso winked, licked his lips and just before he walked off said, 'I'll meet you here at 7.30pm.'4

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*(Cadbury stomach- word of my own makings. When a dark skinned guy has a six-pack it looks like a Cadbury Dairy Millk bar. Yummy!)

Author notes

okay I put this in erotica and adult because the others in this series are classed as that and I'm sure there is more to come! Be honest with your critiquing. Don't water it down I don't mind bluntness. Thanks for reading!

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  • springie
    December 8, 2007

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    Good Job

    Good descriptions, you have a talent for writing. I was drawn into the story and wanted more...hard to do for me as I often get bored with too much discription. I think you had just enough and I liked you using discriptions that I was unfamiliar with (cadbury stomach) I live in chicago and other than the time I was in Portsmouth while in the navy I haven't had much Cadbury chocolate other than the easter eggs we get over here.

    Keep up the good work and write more! Your good at it.


  • Knightsong
    November 28, 2007

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    4.5/5

    McClaren? Excuse me? I think you mean McLaren. Some fan you are...j.k

    Good descriptions and such. Nice. Molto romanze, per favre! (not sure if that was proper Italian...)


  • Jouven
    November 26, 2007

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    "chocolate-honey brown skin embraced the sun streaming into the garage" Powerful description. Your descriptions and verbiage has improved thus far in your work.

    I do feel that at this point we need to be learning more about the character, she is a engineer for a powerful racing team and yet she doesn't seem to be able to work on her stuff. It might be nice to see her be a little more confident in herself. Shes sexy, smart, and makes a ton of money, she should be relaxing a bit and commanding these guys to do as she wants!!!

    Still, I find the writing fast paced and the characters action-oriented. Keeping your tempo up is important.


    • Redtearstains
      November 26, 2007
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      Thank you for your comments throught this seriesy thing. I totally agree with what you're saying. I think in the next paragraph I'll do like a full description of her character. Thanks again!


  • angel.of.mine
    November 24, 2007

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    ther was a speeling mistake i sawed .. but ... now i cant find it~!LOL ohhh this was soo gud ^_^ haha the tension.....her poor nipples BAHAHA newho, this was realli gud, the way you described the charactors(hope i spelled that right) was great cadbury, yumm now im hungry!! GRR keep writing i want more!! MROE I TELL U MORE!! r u like a car fanatic?
    baha

    • Redtearstains
      November 24, 2007
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      I'm a bit of a car fanatic yes! Alonso=Fernando Alonso a member of McClaren (McCorman) team. Lewis Carl Hamilton is now Louis Carl Nurmi. Mmmm Cadbury is yummy. Will try and hunt down that spelling mistake!

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