Once you're engaged, there's very few things you can do to excite you. You feel locked, the key thrown away. You'll never again feel the freedom and flutter of love, you'll never again feel the right to talk and breathe on your own. You're trapped.
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- First Lines! by Bitter Irony.
200 points, ended November 30, 2007, 56 entries
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• next story in this contest, remove from contest - First Lines by werner1221.
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Hay that is intersting.
Reading the comments below your thirteen.
But what they dont see is that it is a character and not everyone feels the happniess of engagment.
I though this was ace: what away to do something different.
blake ♣
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He he. good. Since when do YOU know about getting engaged. you are 13...
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a very different look n gettin engaged.
good luck and thanks for entering
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Wow! That's a very different outlook on the subject. I would certainly like to read more.
I suggest getting rid of "you can do to excite you"--might "Once you're engaged, very few things excite you anymore" work better?
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!
~Bitter Irony -
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Thanks for the comment!
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