Screams

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I heard screams as I entered the hallway. I checked in every room, but they were all empty. I entered one room, when I turned back, the door was locked. More screams echoed in my ears.1

I ran towards the door and tried to open it, but of course, it was still locked. I looked around the room, trying to find another way out. The only exit was a window, and that was one exit, I wouldn't be taking. I tried the door again, and it opened right up.2

"Evalyn, come find me," the voice echoed through the halls, "Evalyn, don't be afraid." I started to walk through the endless halls. Before I knew what was happening, I started searching rooms.
"Evalyn, come, do not be afraid of me. come find me," the voice was closer.3

I walked into a room. The room was a dark blue color. The bed was made. I gasped when my eyes adjusted to the darkness. In the middle of the room was a pale girl. She looked about thirteen. Dolls surrounded her. she picked one up and began to comb its hair. Her own black hair fell over her face.4

The girl was looking down. The ghostly voice returned.
"Evalyn, oh Evalyn. Come sit by me." It was the girl.
"H-how do you know my name?" I demanded.
"Come sit." She raised her hand at me, and I started walking. I tried to stop walking, but I couldn't.5

She looked at me straight in the eyes as she made me walk. Her eyes were a frightening icy blue. I tried to look away but i couldn't. It was as if she had a grip on my mind. She lowered her hand when I was next to her. A powerful force pulled me into a sitting position.6

I tried to get up. The girl stared at me and said,
"Evalyn. You cannot escape yourself."
"Myself? What do you mean?" I asked.
"I am you, you are me. It's quite a long story," she answered.
"It's not like I'm going anywhere. I need to know how you are me." I said.7

She let out a long sigh. She looked like she was about to tell me, when she let out a terrifying scream. What was most terrifying was how the scream sounded. It sounded like a thousand screams. Just like the ones I heard in the halls.8

I looked to where the girl was, but she was gone. I got up and walked out of the room. What was that little girl talking about? Was she crazy, or was I crazy? I just walked and walked. I was in a narrow hallway.9

The hall seemed to get even more narrow as I neared a door at the end of the hall. The only light was a small window at the end of the hall. The moon was only a sliver in the sky. The wind was a loud howl. The only sound other than the thump of my heart, and the tap of my shoes on the hard wood floor.10

The hallway ended, and I stared at a door. I almost turned around and ran the other way. It's only a room, I thought. But as I reached for the knob, I felt a chill go up my spine. The knob was cold as ice. I slowly opened the door.11

I walked in the room and let out a sigh of relief. The room was empty. I walked to the center of the room. There was a round, blood-red carpet. The door slammed shut behind me. I turned around and saw the door lock.12

Something kept me standing on the crimson carpet no matter how hard I tried to move. All around me faces, and ghostly bodies appeared. They all opened their mouths and screamed. The screams sounded like millions of people shreiking. All the pale, ghostly people began to close in on me.13

"No!" I screamed, "Stay away from me!" The people kept coming closer and closer. They all stopped, and then the girl that looked 13 stepped in front of me. She screamed,
"Goodbye Evalyn! See you in Hell!"

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  • loyda
    February 23, 2008

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    ooh! i could be wrong, but from what i think at the end, it is like she was about to die, and the little girl could have been Death, and was coming for her or something.

    then again i could be wrong.

    it was very freaky i have to say! thank you for joining my contest!


    • Beneath The Mask silver member
      February 23, 2008
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      you're right! lol. no one ever gets it right! people always msg me and guess. you rock!


  • Ninja Bubble
    January 21, 2008

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    It seems like it's a novel snippet, as you start out in a random place without any explanation. I only saw two grammatical errors. So overall nice read I must say!


  • Beneath The Mask silver member
    December 27, 2007
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    that is a-okay. I understand.


  • Olinda
    November 23, 2007
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    wow! this is... freaky. i like it but i want it continued... and then not.... i dont get my emotions right now..... anyway.. awesome story!


  • xMomo
    November 23, 2007
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    ooo i love this story very inspirational


  • Olinda
    November 22, 2007

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    very good. But you should finish it because i was on the edge of my seat, and then you just left it blank. i am sad....


    • Beneath The Mask silver member
      November 23, 2007
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      I finished it Olinda! you can now read it. I renamed it Screams. thanks! read it soon!

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