A black moon whispers the story1
Tells why storms roar2
Dark shall fall for light3
Night shall reign nevermore.4
A silver moon sighs5
Creating the velvet night6
The sparkling stars7
As Heaven and Earth become one.
Author notes
Star,
I know I'm your friend but please...only give me an award if I've earned it. I don't care if you give me last place, as long as I earned it fair and skware.
A contest entry
- Anything And Everything (Branch Out, Peoplez!!!) by Felissa.
300 points, ended November 23, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Well, this is very powerful. Good meter. The rhythm was neither rushed nor slow. It was short, but not too short. I'm glad it wasn't a dreadfully long one either, because those can get repetitive... Emotion-wise, it paints a rather cliche but beautiful picture nonetheless - with this kind of poem, cliche is not always bad as some may tell you. The imagery is vivid and it airs a new fashion of sending a message that is centuries old. Good job on this.
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wow so powerfull and many feelings AND emotion i think you did an awesome job with this great job
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Absolutely! Impartial judge here!
But really, this was quite good. The imagery was wonderful, to start. I got very vivid pictures in my mind from even looking at it. For something very short, it described a lot.
Also, thank you for having the first entry I've seen that's a poem. Much obliged.
Good luck!
~_^Star
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