Writing Fluff: The Death... (Dun Dun Dun) ... Of Yuudai Miyazawa!!! Mwahahaha! XD

"Yuudai!" Kura’i A-regna's voice rang out, sharp and hostile. "Where is the food?!?!?!? Smoke is hungry!" The sounds pouring from her cold lips were acid. She turned to the smoky white tiger. "Aren't you, my pet?" Her voice lowered to the tone reserved for her only true companion.1

The enormous feline purred in agreement, tail flicking lazily about. His bright yellow eyes were dangerously narrow.2

Yuudai swallowed nervously outside the door, heart thumping in his chest. He cleared his throat. "Smoke ... finished the last of them yesterday," he croaked drily. The mental image of the tiger ripping apart the corpses of those who had been killed in Kura'i A-regna's raids and feasting on their flesh was enough to make him shudder.3

Smoke growled low in his throat, discontent. He was ravenous, and ready to sink his claws into anyone for a bit of meat. His claws unsheathed and slid out with a slight grating.4

The Dark Child peered into his eyes. The glowing yellow orbs made it clear that he needed flesh. Now. There was not enough time for another raid; if he didn't eat right away, he would lose control. She sighed softly; she would have to get rid of Yuudai. Well, it would only be a minor inconvenience, she could always find someone else to take his place. "Yuudai," she ordered, "Come in."5

Yuudai gulped, beads of sweat rolling down his face. He had never been asked to enter the chamber of darkness before. Slowly, his hand crept toward the door handle, then came abruptly to a halt a few hairs' breath from it. Was it safe?6

"I said, come in," the voice said darkly.7

Yuudai realized it might be more dangerous NOT to obey her. His cold, clammy fingers slipped on the handle...then twisted it to the right and pulled towards him. With a creaking sound, the door slid open. Light poured through the wide opening into the darkness.8

The Queen of Darkness squinted against the brightness, her sharp mouth contorting into a scowl. "Close the door." Her coal black eyes revealed a maddening tint of red.9

Yuudai's breath quickened. "Yes," he whispered throatily, closing the door at once. The chamber was enclosed in darkness, and all he could see were two sets of glowing, hungry eyes: coal black alight with fiery red and ugly yellow filled with an animal craving.10

The tiger seized the oppurtunity and tensed back, loosening up, then pounced. His powerful jaws closed in, his nose sniffing to savor the scent of the delectable morsels.11

"Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaauuuugh!!!"12

The tortured, almost inhuman screams cut through the thick air, like a carving knife slashing through meat. Many people of Atlantis woke from sleeping in their beds. Then they were still, and the night was engulfed in a heavy silence.

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  • Chibi-chan
    November 20, 2007

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    YUUDAI DIES A TERRIBLE DEATH! YEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEES!!!

    I need a pure evil char, and he's it. More to Dragons and LC coming soon.


  • Indistrict Cullen
    November 20, 2007
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    Nice. butbut, could you please rename the tiger? Smoke reminds me of Moonsmoke ^^

    whee.


    • Chibi-chan
      November 20, 2007
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      Smoke ish the name of the tiger. You haven't met anyone else yet. XD


      • Indistrict Cullen
        November 21, 2007
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        Oh? I'm sick, so = lazy to read your latest updates. My bad XD

        • Lover of Stories
          November 21, 2007
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          You already read the part with Smoke in it. It was in one of the SFO chapters. You probably just forgot. And I hope you get better soon. ^.^

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