I lay there in the soft grass, staring at the cloudy sky. I saw no blue, no sun. It was dull and gray. I hated it. It was the blue sky I wanted. The yellow sun that i craved, warming my icy skin. The wind blew. It chilled my skin and moved the grass. I heard foot steps. I froze. Fear took me over. He was coming. He'd found me. All I wanted was the blue sky. I shut my eyes tight, feeling myself tremble. His steps grew louder and I knew he was close. They stopped, I could hear him breathing softly.I felt his breath on my ear so I assumed he'd knelled next me.1
"Hey, it's me."2
That wasn't my father. My eyes snapped open. It was the one i loved. The one to save me. My blue sky. He laid down next to me intertwining his hand in mine. I watched him and he turned to me and smiled. After minutes of silence he looked at the sky.3
"Looking for the blue sky?" he asked.4
"Yes." I replied softly.5
I stared at him hoping he would look back. He didn't, he went on staring at the cloudy sky.6
"It's not coming..." He said.7
"I know..." I said blinking back tears.8
I turned back to the gray sky still hoping the clouds would break. I closed my eyes squeezing his hand tighter. I knew this was it. The clouds would never break and I would never be in the blue again. The tears were escaping from my eyes and I felt his hand slip out of mine.9
"Don't cry..." a voice said.10
I trembled at the voice. It wasn't that of my savior's but my father's. I jolted up into a sitting stance and turned to see my father with a gun to the head of the only person I had left.11
"Daddy let him go please...."12
Those were the last words I ever spoke, for my father shot me right after "please". I never found out what happened to my savor but I hope he lives. I hope he lives...
A contest entry
- For Writers 14 And Under Only!!! by Andy Stephenson.
175 points, ended December 13, 2007, 20 entries
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Comments
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p3 'He laid down', p13 'father shot me'.
This was dramatic. I didn't really understand why her father shot her. He must have been against the relationship. This is a good story, but I feel that you could do so much more with it. Thanks for entering my contest.
Andy

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strange, and wow... 0.obeginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 5, characters: 4.


