A voice of terror.

i heard the shrill voice of terror. It blocked out my thoughts. Who was screaming? What were they screaming for? There were reasons why someone would scream with that kind of voice. I had never quite heard any human scream like that, but I was still hoping it was a human. That kind of scream . . . I never heard anything quite like it before . . . It curdled the blood. It could make people fear for their life just by hearing it. It echoed through the walls of wherever I was. I had the urge to scream as well, but didn't know if it was safe to do that.1

I eased up the wall behind me so I would be standing. My hand touched the wall, it seemed it was made out of bricks. sticky moisture, cold and damp. Maybe red ones? I couldn't tell, it was complete darkness, like some bad dream someone had.2

Suddenly The screaming had stopped. Had the person died? Or was he or she safe now? I guessed it was probably a girl. What had happened? Was it my turn to scream with sure terror?3

Author notes

This was for a freewrite. hope you like it!!!

I just imagined it in Squire's Castle, but idk if it fits. im not really basing it off the story. thanks anyways. :]

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  • Silver Dancer silver member
    January 19
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    well please say they live or dose it mean that they die and scream in terror ow.....wow good luck


    • Melli
      January 19
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      It's left up to the imagination haha. In your case, they live! haha Thanks again.


  • Mel-the-Believer
    October 12, 2008

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    I guess it could fit. Thanks for the entry. I liked it and could see it becoming a larger story, an extremely fascinating, intriguing story. Either way this is cool. Good luck. God Bless!


  • xBitterxSweetx
    February 15, 2008

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    This would be a good introduction to a story that could have an unimagineable twist to it. Thanks for entering!


  • beezy92
    January 26, 2008

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    I asked for no horror. So I'm disqualifying you. Feel free to enter something else. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest!


  • On.Cue
    December 29, 2007

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    Very short, interesting 'plot' going on here with suspense but the constant asking of questions put a halt to the entire story.


  • HeatherRoseBrown
    December 23, 2007

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    I got goosebumps reading the description of the scream. I think not knowing why someone was screaming works better than describing what caused it.

    I also liked the way you described the location. I could almost feel the texture of the bricks and found myself wondering (then wishing I hadn't started wondering) what the wet, sticky substance was.

    Overall, I feel this is a well told vignette.


  • On Frail Wings.
    December 22, 2007

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    this is really good too!lol i like your writes. :] they're very entertaining to read. haha. this is pretty interesting. i like!

    • Melli
      December 22, 2007
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      Oh and again, thanks for the comments! i love them (ur comments). feel free to comment ANY anytime, haha. thanks, im glad u like my stories


  • Seria
    December 10, 2007
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    This is very short, but it's okay. Good luck in the contest!


  • Seachelle
    November 18, 2007

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    Hmmm... I can't help but wonder WHY the screaming is happening to begin with, but that is what adds to the suspence of the story. The fear of the unknown. I wish you could have wrote more to this... There was one thing I saw that was awkward and it was 'It curdled the blood.' I think you might have meant to write it differently but with the same effect.. Either way, it caught me attention and it was pretty dang good for not picking up a pencil for a few months, haha! Just a little bit of warm up is all you need

    • Melli
      November 18, 2007
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      Yea, i didn't think it was that bad either! LOL . . . well, it curdled the blood" havent u heard that before? I dont know what else to write to this, so thats it. thanks for the comment!

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