White was the snow
And white was the crowd
White was the colour
Of my miserable shroud.1
White was dress
I wore with such ease
In total ignorance
To your lies and sleaze.2
White is the colour
I shall now connect
To the factors in life
That love has wrecked.
A contest entry
- Ok, here's the deal... by Drac.
510 points, ended July 2, 2008, 21 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Poetry(I'll add more points soon) by Myeisha.
185 points, ended December 8, 2007, 35 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
I've been planning this story for ages, tell me what you think
Comments
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Love the writing-style and the flow of it! Very well written, with a natural sound =D Nicely pulled off ;D
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.
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very simple and short, i love it!!
it had ggod flow and it was easy to read,lol. Thanx for entering!!!
Keep on writing!!
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Oh, i like that one. its simple, and rhymes!!!! love it. haha, idk but it sounds good as it rhymes. and i acutally really like it. its a good peice, and its from the point of view from the bride right? i wasnt really that sure. . . i like it, great job!
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Thanks for the comment!
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yupp, no problem! you can read one of my stories
lol.
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And I shall
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