The things that I've seen, I've witnessed, have driven me to complete madness.
Author notes
This is only the first scentence of a story.
A contest entry
- First Lines! by Bitter Irony.
200 points, ended November 30, 2007, 56 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please Tell Me What You Think
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I would almost suggest leaving a motif like madness speak for itself: while your first line may pike some interest, it's too vague and cliche (for the horror genre, anyway) to really hook readers. It might help to give the line a more character-rooted tone: for example, "I think I've gone mad."
Still, you do establish a tone pretty well in these first lines: just like an old gothic horror story. I'd be interested in reading it, just to see your take on the genre.
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!
~Bitter Irony
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