Entry

Destiny never made a mistake before. Sure, it did a lot of stuff we didn't like, but it never made a mistake. I was its first.

A contest entry

Ever thought this way? I know I have.

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  • Bitter Irony
    November 26, 2007
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    Nice opening! I'd certainly like to read more!

    I love how you introduce the character's tone and attitude quickly, in a way that makes him/her feel real and makes the reader want to learn more.

    Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!

    ~Bitter Irony


  • hllykat
    November 14, 2007

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    "These are the first lines of something great." That was my first impression upon reading this. What else can I say? I would like to know more about "Destiny's" first mistake. Nice job.