The corpse lay before me. A fine specimen, except for that nasty little condition. You know the one, death. I had a cure for that. They say curiosity killed the cat, it also destroys world. It was my curiosity that led to the cure. It was curiosity that led to the destruction of the world as we know it.
Author notes
The beginning of something I am working on.
A contest entry
- First Lines! by Bitter Irony.
200 points, ended November 30, 2007, 56 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Wow! You had me hooked from the second sentence!
I'm a little iffy about beginning stories with date and time, but you've pulled it off pretty well. Still, see if you can move the corpse right to the beginning; it's a better hook.
What is the relevance of the last sentence? You jump from a "cure for death" to "curiosity"--what's the relationship?
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!
~Bitter Irony -
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Changes have been made. It is more as it was originally. I had cut it down somewhat to fit the five sentence criteria. The date and time are irrevelant to the rest of the story and now eliminated. Thank you for your insight.
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