Sometimes an apple rots. Fruit usually does. But it is most unusual when someone's will rots, their will to live, and be creative. This is what happened to Tiyler Granson.
A contest entry
- First Lines! by Bitter Irony.
200 points, ended November 30, 2007, 56 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Nice! I love how the mundane beginning quickly becomes a mystery. How did Tiyler Granson "rot?" The reader can't wait to find out!
"Someone[']s" is possesive; include the apostrophe.
"will to live and be creative" This is a little rough; see if you can make this flow smoother with the preceding sentence.
Thanks for entering the contest, and good luck!
~Bitter Irony -
I really like 'sometimes an apple rots' as a first line, however personally if I were reading a story with the rest of that, I'd think it repetative x.x
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