She stretched her wings, unfurling them from their full span, and with a great leap she jumped off the roof and soared into the night. 1
I breathed in the cold night air. My wings felt good after being furled in for such a long time. My parents were tucked away in bed, well their not my real parents their adoptive parents. I was born in a place called the “school” I well um I’m part bird. Part Peregrine Falcon to be exact. I was in a flock of 6 including me. My name Cole I am the leader, we all go the middle school ECMS. We are all 13 and are pretty good at taking care of our selves..2
Author notes
uhhhhhhhhh i wanted to write a fanfic and now i introducing u to my flock and if your i it ur special
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verrrry nice!!
awesome!!! write some m0re of it please!!!
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This is a really cool story idea! Very original, keep expanding it!
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okaaaaaaaaaaay one thing.
THEY ARE = They're.
Not Their. Which is possessive.
Other than that, I like that the charachter is a bird. That's original.
Ourselves is one word. And you can't switch from talking in 3rd person (she) to 1st person (I). But never stop writing; practice makes perfect!
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