Just a child

I hate the way you look at me like that1

I知 just a child2

You whisper those words in my ear3

I知 just a child4

I twist and turn dreading our next meet5

I知 just a child6

My innocence is ripped apart when I see you7

I知 just a child8

Why do you do this too me, torment me so9

I知 just a child10

I sit alone and cry at night11

I知 just a child12

But then I have these dreams13

I rip and tear at your clothes, at your skin14

Suddenly I am not just a child15

I taste your blood in my mouth16

I am not just a child17

You can take advantage of me no more18

I am not just a child19

You scream in pain as I laugh with joy20

I am not just a child21

Its now my turn to watch you be tortured, In pain22

I am not just a child23

But then I awake24

And the nightmare begins again and I realise25

I am just a child.26

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This is really one of my only pieces where i am astonished with what i wrote. I really dont know where it came from but im kinda pleased with it.

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  • crystaltips
    October 22, 2004
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    thank you im glad you liked it crystaltips

  • Ghoest
    October 21, 2004
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    violence...I love it. It's a good write! I like the way you structured the poem. Good stuff!

  • crystaltips
    October 5, 2004
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    Thank you soo much. Im glad you loved it and i will attempt to read some of your stuff when i have some time thank you !!!
    Crystal xxx


  • sheissounsure
    October 4, 2004
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    this is freaking scary!!!!!! but i love it, lots of dark currents going through it.....LOVED IT lol

  • crystaltips
    October 4, 2004
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    thanks so much- im glad u liked it!! crystal xx

  • BabyBlueEyes996
    October 4, 2004
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    this is awesome, i loved this poem, exellent work, very dark and deep, wicked work!

  • crystaltips
    October 4, 2004
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    thanks alot good luck with the contest too- i hope loads n loadsa ppl enter 4 u! crystal xxx

  • crystaltips
    October 4, 2004
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    thanks alot- im glad u liked it!! thank u crystal

  • Jinxgirl
    October 3, 2004
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    the wording is unique and shocking

  • Jinxgirl
    October 3, 2004
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    this is good. the middle took a stunning twist. very good about a subject that is hard to write about. good luck in my contest


  • October 3, 2004
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    This is a really good piece. I'm astonished just reading it. Violent but it came across really well, it was excessive and it made the poem really good. Awesome write darlin

    *~Rosey~*

  • crystaltips
    October 3, 2004
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    thanks agen xx


  • October 3, 2004
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    wow, violent

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