On a Balcony

In the moonlight, her hair seemed otherworldly to him.1

As she smiled at him a lump rose in throat and he managed only a choked hi. 2

She seemed to look right through him and know all his secrets and his fears. He wanted to run away but his feet refused to move. 3

“What are doing here ?” She asked softly4

Not knowing he just smiled and shrugged his shoulders5

“I know why you’re here” she said6

Afraid of her answer he tried to speak but managed only a grunt7

“Its fate” she said confidently8

“Maybe” he replied 9

“Do you want know why I’m here? She asked10

Happy to focus the conversation on her he nodded11

“I was going to jump off this balcony” she said gravely12

His eyes bulged in horror 13

“Why?” He asked exasperated14

“I’ve got nothing to live for” she said plainly 15

“What do mean?” 16

“All my life I’ve been a nobody and I can’t take it anymore” she said looking over the balcony17

"Why do you think that?" He asked with a certain amount of fear in his voice18

"I’ve wasted my life" 19

They both stood silent in the darkness the only sounds coming from the outer regions of the forest that enveloped them. 20

"Are you happy?" She asked turning around to face him her eyes hard and soaked with tears. 21

Surprised at the question he managed a nod of his head22

Staring deeply into him, she managed a placid smile 23

"Have you ever been told what a bad liar you are?" 24

"On many occasions" he said with a frail laugh 25

Wiping the tears off her face she looked out at the balcony and stared out at the moon26

I can see it in your eyes she whispered27

“What?” 28

“That you are unhappy” 29

“Yes but unlike you I will not try to jump off this balcony”30

“No you won't because you've already given up on life” 31

“Yes I suppose so” he said with a sigh 32

“A stronger man would have disagreed with me” 33

“But as you can see I am not that man” he replied34

On the balcony a wind had begun to blow out a sorrowful cry. 35

His tears splashing softly on the ground he watched the leaves float away into the darkness. 36

“Why are you here?: She asked softly37

“Fate!” he said in bitter voice38

His hands had begun to shake and his upper lips quiver39

“Life is not what I thought it would be" he said with a cracking voice40

“No its not” she said with a laugh.41

Her hair flew around as the wind began to blow harder.42

“It doesn’t have to be this way" he said as he looked up her moody green eyes.43

"But it is” .44

“Damn it we can change!” He scram tearfully.45

Laughing she shook her head and walked toward him.46

Grabbing his hands, she kissed them softly.47

“We can’t change who we are” she said mournfully.48

“Why not”. 49

“I don’t know” she with a shrug of her shoulders 50

“Its just life”. 51

Grabbing her waist he looked at her small lips and kissed them with a bluntness that made his lips hurt52

The winds began to blow forcefully and the autumn leaves on the floor began to whirl around them 53

Pulling away she her eyes narrowed and her mouth began to pout54

“What was that for?”55

"I don’t know"56

Dropping his hands she looked up him at with daggered eyes and shook her head.57

“Why are you here?” she asked again58

“I am here" he said with a horse voice "so that I can hold you”59

"I don’t need someone to hold"60

"Neither do I" 61

Looking deeply into her eyes he leaned in and felt the softness of her lips on his.62

Nothing moved save for his heartbeat. 63

Her eyes softened as he pulled away 64

“You’re a terrible kisser you know,” she said gravely 65

"I know" he said with no emotion 66

Leaning in again her lips melded with his 67

Her hands gripped his tightly again as the air around them began to blow and chill them. 68

"What do you want?" She asked as she slowly pulled away her lips.69

“You” he said with a faint smile.70

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My name Julio Mireles though i prefer to be called Pancho for reasons unknown. I'm not that interesting a person but i will say that I think might be getting panic attacks and i hate my doctor so I'm screwed for now.

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Comments

  • Awwwwwwwwwwwww :3
    That's so cute!

  • werner1221
    January 24, 2008

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    awww. cute. haha.
    goodjob.
    fav line:
    What do you want?" She asked as she slowly pulled away her lips.

    “You” he said with a faint smile

    again, gj.


  • nixers
    November 11, 2007

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    Very beautiful! I think there are a few mistakes though, for example: "Nothing moved saved for his heartbeat". It's supposed to be "save" not "saved". Also "“Do you Want know why I’m here? She asked". I don't think "want" is supposed to have a capital letter. Otherwise it is a very good and beautiful story!


  • potaytee
    November 9, 2007
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    Aw that is really sad and beautiful. I really liked it. Well done!