It never effected the tree very much, when the people stuck pieces of other dead trees to it. The tree didn't really notice the people with yellow stars on their coats staring at it everyday. It just stood there, as it always had, collecting sunlight and making food while watching the world go by.
Author notes
If you have no idea what this is, it's about the Jewish laws (no longer allowed to travel, must were the Star of David, etc.) pinned to a tree in the town center. This was from The Upstairs Room by Johanna Reiss, I had to write it for Reading class... >.>
For the contest: Memorable
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- Out Of Your Head- Show me the Creativity by Miss Hanako Cullen.
286 points, ended November 29, 2007, 6 entries
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This was very simple, yet it had a purpose! This was very touching. I wasn't sure at first if it was a poem or a story but it reads like a short story.
Your last line is awkward- It just stood there, as it always had, { collecting sunlight and making food } while watching the world go by.
{ Making Food } is an odd way to represent this story. You've just finished saying how simple this tree was, how nothing ever effected it but there were things going on all around it.
I think in replacement of { Food } I would use the word { Nourishment } or { Sustenence }
Something different than the blunt word Food. : )
Other than that little tid bit your story was very moving and very well written for so low a word count.
Great Job!
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Thanks a lot! Now that I look at it, it does look a bit blunt...
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