I sit and stare at the wall, not listening to what he's telling me. I haven't done anything, yet here I am. In the principal's office, getting yelled at. Again. All I was doing was my homework in Biology. The teacher put us to work in what she calls "Quiet Time" but the students call it "Pass Notes Time".1
They say I said something. But the words that they said that I said, I would never let escape my lips. They have had it in for me every since they found out that I was a junior. A junior in a sophomore class.2
"I am sorry to say this, but I am going to have to suspend you," says a strange and familiar voice off in the distance.3
"What?" I ask, coming back to earth.4
"I am going to have to suspend you, Aliaga," states the principal.5
"For what?! I haven't done anything!" I scream at him.6
"Not according to many of the students," responds Principal Druid. "Many of your classmates have reported you to be threatening them."7
"But there lying!" I yell. "I've never threatened anyone!"8
"Enough, Aliaga! But I have had my final say. You are expelled," he states as he reachesd for the phone. "I shall call your parents to let them know."9
I slam the door to his office and run to my locker. I took all of the stupid textbooks out and put all of my stuff inside my back pack. Then I rush towards the main entrance, the textbooks still in my arms and my backpack on my back. Mr. Druid opens his door before I run past it. I shove the books into his chest and run out of the school.10
He was yelling something at me, but I ignore him. I run as fast and as far as I can. Nothing could stop me. I start to slow down by the park, trying hard to think of my next move.11
This isn't fair. I haven't done anything. So, I get in trouble for absolutely nothing what so ever. Great. This is just great.
~*~
I am sitting on a swing in the park when a police vehicle pulls up. The police man steps out of his car and walks towards me. I should run, but I seem to be glued to the plastic under my butt.12
If he tells me that I have to get into his car, I will run, run far, far away. I don't trust police, any of them.13
"Excuse me," he says. "Is your name Aliaga Pegason?"14
I nod my head as I prepare to leap from my swing and run for it. He advanses towards me.15
"I will need you to come with me," he tells me. I don't move an inch. "You will have to sit in back, Aliaga. I'm afraid I don't have enough room...."16
I run for it. I am half way across the park before he even relizes that he is talking to an empty swing. I hear the start of an engien. The sireins are next. I can see flashes of red and blue in the corner of my eye. I run faster.17
There's a stich in my side, but I don't stop to catch my breath. I keep running until I am standing outside my front door. The police man fallowed me all the way to my house and started to get out of his car.18
I fiddle with my keys until I get the right one between my pointer an thumb. I stick the key into the hole, open the door and rush inside. The cop is almost to the poarch. I slam the door in his face and lock it. Leaning against the door to catch my breath, I notice that I am the only one in the house. What now?
Author notes
Aliaga Pegason
This is based on a true story, however the person the main character did not run from the cops. But the part about her being suspended for doing absolutly nothing, that is true.
A contest entry
- Nanowrimo rip off by Token Massacre.
650 points, ended December 9, 2007, 5 entries
Honorable mention
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Comments
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Watch spelling... principle's should actually be principal's for example.
Without knowing what happened in the class the principal's approach seems extreme. You may want to expand on that.
Thoughts should either be in italics or single quotes to set them off from the rest of your story.
watch when you switch focus on characters.
He was yelling something at me but I ignored him
should have a comma after me.
Also watch your tenses. You're writing mainly in present tense so you want to keep it that way. So words like "said" should be "say" or "ran" should be "run" for example.
When the contest is over I'll give you an overall impression of the story, but for now I'll let you know that this has a lot of possibility. It can easily be related to by people. Keep at it! (I'll comment again at the end of next week on the part that you've added.

