***Chapter One*** (Of three)
Space Battles and hidden intentions1
Above the city of New Metronome, the fleet, known as "The Ships of Godsend" prepare to hyperspace off into the unknown distance of space. Gallant battleships of gold and white plated armored hulls, fully functional anti-blaster/asteroid shields are panned into the on position. Glares of sun glisten off the ships, blinding any passersby. Forty five ships in all, and at once, purge into the sky, breaking the barriers of color and sound. A crackling shatter of humming engines fade away, leaving only there vague outlines in the sky. Fear quaked the souls of the men and women of New Metronome. War was just around the corner.2
Admiral Eric Dugalle, the pride and lore of Godsend. Accomapanied by Fleet commander Reymond Von Till, and Fleet Lt. An'dernal Girtch. Now in the foreboding universe, swirling in hyperspace, gallantly undergo procedures to be ready for the inevitable enemy resistance that lies at the end of the jump.3
The admiral sits in the bridge, awaiting updates and checks on the rest of the fleet.4
"Battery cannons online." One of the personal on the bridge says.5
"Ion Cannons Online." Another chattered out. 6
"Shields Up." The same says, "We're awaiting confirmation from the other sir."7
"Home Three, report." Dugalle says as he speaks into a mouth piece, connecting to Godsends third flagship.8
"All operations online and awaiting to engage." Fleet commander Reymond says enthused.9
"Home Two, report." Dugalle speaks again.10
"Waiting on the Derilect cannons to come online....We're good to go" Andernal confirms.11
The Fleet comes out of hyperspace, and stops abruptly over the system of Genesis. The planet held control by the insidious Blair Brotherhood. Or to make it short, the pirates of the core worlds. The Swarm that infests the seven planets that make up the center of the universe. They may control few planets but have a corrupt power over a great regiment of corrupt soldiers and machine. But the armada that they hold in their possesion is nothing against Godsend.12
"Await my order to attack." Dugalle orders as he looks into the distance. And as he expected, the Brotherhoods defensive line hyperspace's into their position. "As predictable as ever Blair."13
"We're receiving a transmission from the Brotherhoods home world of Thoretta." The captain informs Dugalle14
"Patch them through." Dugalle ordered, smirking and snickering lowly,"best let these pirates have their say before we annihilate them."15
A figure appears on a large screen. Clad in black clothing with gray trimmings. Brown hair and cunning face. A beret' perched on his head. Very French, but no mustache. Seeming to be in the late twenties, the head of the brotherhood speaks in his monotenous tone. Vollowmire Blair was his name.16
"This is Blair, the emperor of the brotherhood, and formal General of the directoret of interplanetary trade. You are trespassing over one of my planet of Genesis, retreat or prepare to be boarded!"17
"Vollowmire, you haven't changed a bit. We are here to rid you of your unfathomable control over the core worlds. You have corrupted the minds of the inhabitants and entire crops have been destroyed, you are no peace bringer, your nothing more than a dictator, surrender or watch as we demolish your so called 'Empire'." Dugalle says with much courage in his tone, waiting the inhumane retort that was to come from Blair.18
"Ha! You sniveling ignoramus! We have more than a force to obliterate you. All forces enter Genesis space and fire at will!" With that Blair screeches off the screen and the battle enitiates.19
"*Cackle**Cackle*. All ships, return fire, deploy fighters and watch out for those nebulas. Hold fire on the derilect cannons, we don't need to show them our power just yet. Home Two, go to the far side of Genesis and decimate any shipyards you encounter, we don't need more opposition on us. Home Three, charge your advance into the enemy, and do not cease fire under any circumstances." Dugalle commands,"Show me what you got Blair."20
Godsends sends terror throughout the system, battery shells flying through dead space, making contact with the Brotherhoods flagship, Monitor. Breaking through the hull. Lasers whizzing by fighters, bombers hitting vital hardpoints on Godsend Cruisers. The Cackling laughter of Blair resonates throughout Home One. Volleys upon volleys of laser fire were devastating Brotherhood forces, but soon enough, The Monitor emplodes after a battery shells hits the engines. The explosion sent an electrical current around the rest of Blairs ships, acting as an EMP. 21
"They're power supplies are dead now. Transports go on and board whats left of the Monitor and the brotherhood frigates, the rest of you, begin landing troops on the surface of Genesis. We need rid the system of all pirate sympathizers." Andernal commands his part of Godsend22
*Hours Later*
[Eric Dugalle reports back to New Metronome, The Cardinal, leader of the system Eureka and the Union of Interglactic Commerse. The U.I.C, along with the 15 Mid-range planets.]23
"Cardinal Melbous, we have successfully engaged Brotherhood Forces. We are now commencing the planetary purge of Blair."24
"Very Good Eric, may Evan be with you. I hope you and your men return safely. Now if you excuse me, you interupted me in the middle of an imporatant conferance" Melbous beckons and motions for Dugalle to end the transmission.25
"Thank you, Sir. My apologies. Dugalle Out"26
The transmission ends and Cardinal Melbous focuses his attetion on three seperate screens. Vollowmire Blair appears on the screen. As well as Leader of the Confederacy of Rimm, the forces that control the rimm worlds of the solar system, Cardinal Alex Romities, and Officer to the Grant of Monicker, the manufacturing company of Tacitus. A valuable substabce that leads to tge making of "Will" Products, weapons used by power holders of the universe, similar to the jedi in Star Wars. President Mot-ron Val.27
"My Lord, U.I.C forces have engaged us on Genesis, we have suffered significant losses in the system. They are now probably preparing a jump to Moise, I will not sit around while they take another one of my planets. Melbous, you are pushing the brotherhood to an end!" Vollowmire issues.28
"Calm Yourself Blair, this was a loss that was nessessary to our cause. Soon, you will have your throne back as core world leader, you must just sit back and watch. I have foreseen much, and I promise you, you will be sitting in your palace when the end of the war is near." Cardinal Melbous say, calming Blair down a bit.29
"And what of us Cardinal? Must we sit and watch as the U.I.C captures us too!? Mot-Ron Val yells back incredulously.30
"Your sarcasm is wasted on me Mot-Ron. I have see'd to it that you will be protected." Melbous cocks back, my new apprentice, Count Irade, will be there shortly."31
"And what can this one do, that my bodygaurds can't?" Mot-Ron questions.32
"...He's a Will user..."33
Everything went silent for a few moments.34
"I apologize for my rudeness Cardinal." Mot-Ron says.35
"You are forgiven. Now begone with you. I have more matters to attend too. Cardinal Romities, I insist that you aid Blair in defending his last six planets." Melbous commends.36
"I'll consider it. Romities Out.37
"Mot-Ron Out."38
"Blair Out."39
The three screens buzz out in a screech, then all is quiet.40
Melbous falls deeper into his 360 turnable chair.41
"Oh, why am I doing this? I'm betraying my people, the same people who elected me because they trusted..."42
"Because you are destined for it." An unknown voice speaks.43
"But father-" Melbous was cut off.44
"No Buts, everything is falling into place. Soon we will be the greatest power in the universe. And you will not, no...cannot stop it from happening," The keeper of the voice is revealed through the shadow. Placing his hand on Melbous's right shoulder,"Look out that window. You see all that. It belongs to you. And soon, everything beyond this, will belong to you too.45
Melbous looks up enthused, "Your right..You are right."46
"Now get up, the senate awaits you to speak. 47
"Yes my father."48
*Chapter End*49
***Chapter Two***
The Transformation of an empire50
The senate chamber was loud. Crowded with different species of man and alien. Quarreling over political views. Men in dressy robes and suits were just entering the room when the Voice of the cardinal roared out, signalling everyone to clam up. The Voice, the cardinal's personal body gaurd, was a white fur covered beast, although looking like a horrifying beast, the Voice was an intelligent creature, quite calm, but aggressive is need be.51
Cardinal Melbous, entered the chamber and walked to the center of the room, and sat on a large circular chair, along with Voice, and his advisors. The platform the chair was bolted on began to rise and the Cardinal spoke in many toungues, respecting that most orginisms in the room did not speak english. The speech that resounded through the room, translated sounded like this.52
"Men! Women! And alien alike. I know that you and your species have gone through much peril during the many years of the war. but I assure you! By the end of the year, the war shall be long over!"53
The chamber roared in applause. Princess Pandora Armanies along with her brother Leminx and Queen Meredith, the matriarchs of the planet New Metrocal, protested.54
"Cardinal Melbous. How can you promise such a hasty gaurantee when the West Rimm forces are still at large and the Blair Brotherhood in still in control of the core worlds?"55
"Ahh, Princess, you and your family are essential to the UIC, we would not lie to you. If you have forgotten, the ships of godsend have engaged the core worlds. And Captain Mensk, Adimiral Artimus, and General Lexmark have already taken a bulk of the West Rimm, what else is left to dispute?"56
The chamber remained quiet.57
"Our trust in you Melbous." Princess Pandora sternly said. Earning a smirk from Leminx and a deathly glare from the queen. 58
The Voice roared out and echoed the room, shaking pillars and damaging eardrums. The princess stood strong, but sat down when her aunt, and queen slapped her.59
"Grrr, Pandora, you need you place young lady."60
A alarm sounded off in the room. Red lights filled the room.61
"Whats wrong?" Melbous gasped.62
"We're recieving a transmission from Moise." The cardinals lead advisor siad.63
"Patch it through to the chamber."64
A large screen slowly lowered into the room and screeched on. A masked man in a black cloak filtered the screen.65
"Who are you and what do you want? It is illegal to interupt the senate without an appointment."66
"....I am Monicker, Highlord of Will, and rougue of the Rimm."67
The senate ooohed and ahhed, the highlor hasn't been seen in decades.68
"..wh..wha...what you request of us you lordship?"69
"I have a propitition for you, Melbous..."70
"Speak, and you will be heard my lord."71
"I want you to pull 25 ships from godsend and send them into the Platos nebula, if all goes well, then you will hear it there."72
One of Melbous's advisors interupted abrubtly.73
"Cardinal! Platos is a Rimm controlled space, surely they'll react to the intru--" He was cut off...when he was shot in the head by the Voice.74
"No one disobeys a will lord...It will be done my lord." Melbous said in a whisper.75
"Very good Cardinal..I will be waiting." The screen buzzed out and
Melbous stood up, looking grim.76
"Get that body out of here."77
"Yes sir." Another advisor said.78
Melbous turned to his audience, who are shocked, and silent.79
"Friends! Family! And allies to the UIC. It is a new day. A new generation! And a new testimony to the galaxy! The UIC will preserve what is right in the universe! WE shall make our eniemies kneel at our power. We will conquer! We will anhialate! I WILL RULE! THAT IS MY UNIVERSAL ORDER!" He siad with an evil grimace, cackling as the room filled with clapping. Up on the sixth row, Princess Pandora sighed...80
"So this is how democracy ends...with thunderous applause."81
---Chapter end---
***Chapter three***
What is this Monstrosity?82
*Back On Genesis*83
The Ships of Godsend have successfully landed on the battleground that is now the surface of Genesis. UIC forces dropships stormed the sky and soldiers jumped out of landing pods. T-4B Ion laser rifles shot out into the distance. Grituitous explosions scared off the local Skaffs, three legged sheep-like farm animals. Blair Brotherhood forces shuddered until enemy fire. Giant walkers fell to the ground and left craters. UIC fighters flying overhead, engaged in a furious dog fight with bitter Brotherhood scorge fighters. 84
The purge lasted exactly three days. Brotherhood units suffered heavy losses and eventually retreated from the planet. The day was won, six more planets to go...
In the captains chambers aboard the Divinty, Admiral Eric Dugalle, An'dernal and Reymond have their morning breakfast and status report.85
Dugalle spoke first at the table. " So guys, we are victorious. That is one less planet for Blair to spread his propaganda."86
"Although, the inhabitants of the planet have taken a crushing blow in income and economy due to our recent attack, they will soon be back up to where they were, maybe even better in a few months." Reymond assured87
"So, whats the next planet on the agenda admiral?"88
"Our next target is the system of Moise. An almost entirely water planet."89
"We know the stories Eric. Never been there before, they say it hasn't stopped rainging there for over a mallenia." Reymond said.90
"Make that two." Eric corrected.91
"You guys know why?" An'dernal asked.92
"Some say that some early scientists tried to create a device that could manipulate the weather....they failed--" Reymond issued93
"Incorrect, they did make such a device, but it malfunctions up on in the clouds, and the shockwave of pollutants and vapors caused a chemical chain reactin that made the clouds of Moise rain, permenentky." Eric spoke, telling them all the horrible story of Moise94
"Thats amazing.."95
"Devastating, but amazing.." Eric whispered96
All was silent...97
WARRR...WARRRR...WARRRR...WARRR went the ships emergency alarm. Eric and the other admirals raced to the bridge.98
"Status report, whats going on!?" Eric commanded.99
"Bzzz, *Screeeeech* Bzzzz"100
"Hello? Hello!? Dammit, someone get me a signal." Eric pushed buttons on protocal, but he didn't need the radio anymore. Whatever was going on, could be seen throught the blast window..101
"What is that thing..?" Reymond asked.102
"What is this monstrosity!?" An'dernal screamed out.103
A large spherical object was slowly hovering toward them, it was huge, a colossal ball of metal and steel. Beams of death came down from the sky. Burning and decimating anything without shields. Red death destroyed homes. It blew through shields and caused explosions of gigantic proportions.104
"How big is that thing?" Eric asked.105
"Uhh..uhm.." One of the bridge assistants stammered out.106
"Dammit, answer me!"107
"Eeeek! Uh, uhm.... according to our scans, it's about 30 kilometers wide and 24 kilometers high. It's armor density, is...off the charts, we're gonna need high powered plasma to puncture that behemoths."108
"It's getting closer!!" Another hand yelled, "Your orders captain."109
"Grrr, bring all batteries online, I want that thing out of the sky yesterday."110
"Yes Sir!"111
"Evan help us.."112
***End Chapter**
--End Genesis One--
Author notes
Heres some stuff to clear up
There are a total of 45 planet in the solar system of Universal Order.
The Core worlds, comprised of 7.
The Mid Worlds, full of 15 planets
And The RIMM (East and West Rimm) Together 18
The Core worlds are controlled by the Blair Brotherhood.
The Mid Worlds, The UIC
The West Rimm is controlled by Cardinal Romities.
The war that Melbous speaks of is the Mellenia year war.
1000 years fighting against the West Rimm and the BB
Monicker, the Highlord of Will, is one of three most powerful beings in the universe.
There is the Highlord, the Matriarch, and the Directoret.
The other two will be revealed to you guys in Genesis two and threeee!
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Comments
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This was a good idea with the potential for a great story, but your grammar and style made it fall flat on to its face and break its nose.
The lenght of the story was too long, too, you could just have entered the first chapter.
Good luck, anyways,
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The story is good, but your syle is monotonous i don't feel the thrill anywhere and scinece fiction isn't my topic.
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I enjoy reading science fiction stories but your story falls a little flat for me. I found the chapters to be too short to really delve into the story. Chapter two is entitled "Transformation of an Empire" however, you don't really give enough room to show the true transformation. I didn't feel that there was enough information given to sink your teeth into the story. You could have taken it a lot farther than you did to make it really enjoyable.
The characters were interesting and the story line was different, however, which caught my attention in the first place. -
Very good. I like where this story is going. Great job and good luck in the contest.
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Did you notice anything weird with Melbous, i really hope your smart enuf to see it

Oh, thnx a lot!
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very good.
I'll get back to you later.
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Uhm, thnx ^-^
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Melbous ..I dont like him
.. this was a fucking good read.. even if i couldnt get it ...only beacause i am not a fan of sci-fi









