As I walked down the busy halls of Lithonia Middle, I thought of my past friendship with Ashley. Ashley was my ex-bestfriend.
Although we're not friends, I still think of her as my sister.
Ashley was a active person who loved to do big activities like movies and songs.she was an great song writer.But at times she could be hard to deal with, but I stuck with it because that's friends are for. I was'nt a good friend to her, we were not good friends to each other. When she changed something ,like a movie,I got mad and tried to stop her. She would go and talk about me sometimes like when she got mad at me. We did not act like good friends.1
The drama between us all started at a slumber party.Ashley was the host, and it was held at her house.She had a crush on a boy that I did'nt like named Tyler. He was a skinny Hispanic looking boy that was in the same team as me, 6-B.There was like 5-8 girls at the party and plenty of stuff to do.We were gonna watch movies, do a music video, play games, and of course , talk to Tyler over the phone, We were gonna do that first.One of the girls ,named Denay, became the main person in this drama. Denay was a pretty girl with short black hair. She loved to play and at times, she could be annoying, but I respected that about her(besides she thought I was annoying also).2
A girl named Shanika and Tasha knew Tyler before any one of the girls in the room. I met Shanika in the 5th grade and I was the first person to talk to her.We used to talk together for the whole class period in 5th grade. The next thing I know she acting like a jerk. Something told me that she was never like that until the day she changed. Tasha was A fashionable girl who loved pink. She was'nt a jerk but she could catch an attitude for no reason.
They dialed Tyler's number and started talking. Every time Tyler answered a question Denay and a few other people(including me) did quiet screams except Denay. Denay Screamed loud and I just laughed every time she did. Another one of Ashley's friends who had the same kind of Authorities did'nt seem to care about any of the drama.3
Now this is the part I got mad in. The three of them, Tasha, Ashley, And shanika, went in the closet leaving the rest of us with nothing to do while they were talking to Tyler.They did it because we were screaming and all she had to do was ask us to quiet down.That was so selfish of her(shanika and Tasha also) and Amelia and I got really mad.Amber was a Hispanic girl who was really sensitive. I did'nt understand her sometimes but she was my friend.Amelia got to the point where she wanted to use my cell phone to call her mom.Denay called her mom and said "Mom, I'm having Ashley Issues" but she did'nt wanna go home, she just talked to her mom.4
It was heaven when Ashley's mom, Ms.Daphlen, walked in.
She told them to get out of the closet and stop talking to that boy, and do something with everyone. Out of Tasha,Shanika,and Ashley, Ashley was the angriest.She wasn't the only one who was mad though.5
The slumber party went on and we started watching movies.After that we went to sleep.6
The next morning, I realized that every-time I called her cell, she did'nt know who was calling because the number was wrong. I asked her could I correct my number in her phone and she gave her permission. I corrected my number and got dressed to play a game with everyone before anyone left.We played a fun game of Jerry.7
As I snapped out of those memories I just remembered the fun times we had together when we wer'e best friends.I decided not to think about those times, and remembered how we became friends. The only reason we were friends was because when she had her micros took-en out in 5th grade people started to ignore her. I always hated when people in my class acted like jerks. I wanted to stay by Ashley when she was alone.8
I walked in the decorated bathroom, and set my books on the small table by the entrance. I sat beside my things and sighed deeply.
I pondered about the old drama. Even know that the drama was over, I still thought of her a my sister.9
Right then i took out a blank sheet of paper and Titled it 'what I think a true friend is'.10
This is what I wrote.
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What I think a true friend is.12
Your only a true friend....13
1.if your friend stops talking to you for months, and finally calls you then you guys act like you never stopped talking.14
2. when you have a fight with your friend and then start talking to each other and act like you never fought.15
3. when you have your friends back no matter what.16
4.When you never ignore your friends17
A true friend is not....18
1. when a person does anything for a friend like homework, academics or when a friend is always doing everything for a person.19
2.When a person talks about another person and doesn't care or always does it.20
3.When a friend pays for everything for a friend.21
4.when you are not honest with a friend.
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I folded the paper and stuck it in my pocket. I picked up my books and headed to my sixth period class,Language arts. 23
I walked in the room filling up of preteens and took my seat. I saw Denay and got up from my seat. I walked over to her and dropped the paper from my pocket on her desk. I agilely hurried to my seat before she said anything.24
I saw Denay reading the note.She wrote on a sheet of paper and walked over to my seat.25
"Here you go" said giving me the note and then walking away.26
I sighed began to read the note.27
I said,28
"I'm gonna show it to Ashley" 29
I did'nt know whether to smile or frown.I simply just looked up and nodded.She nodded back. For the rest of the period, I just thought of what she was gonna say back to Denay.30
what I said on that note was what I truly thought of what a true friend was.There was allot more to it, but I did'nt want to list much of what I thought. It was just what I thought about friendship.31
What do I think friendship is? i think it's a beautiful relationship between two living things.Friendship is the ups and downs of friends.friendship is a shared love of two people helping and having fun.Friendship is allot, to much for me too explain.32
That was what I think friendship is.est friend.
Author notes
I know this is the whole story but it shows our mistakes and what is a true friend and stuff,lol.
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Comments
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I like it.
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Love it
Pretty good. You have a lot of good lists.
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Wow... I don't know about ashley..
Well, this is good, it's ok. You have this in alot of lists! Good job on this story.
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6/10
This seems to have a good plot, but I some part's I got a bit lost. I understand your reason for writing it, but for me I didn't really develop enough, I just didn't feel that you'd poured you heart and soul it to the story.
Sorry, but a good try!
Lots of love, ~Ashley~ xxx
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That's cool.. Well done.
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wow..
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it makes sense and is very real. good luck
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I love it.
This story reminded me and my friends in high school. There was always a lot of drama. I think it's part of growing up. LOL! -
Ashanti was a active person who loved to do big activities like movies and songs.she was an great song writer.But at times she could be hard to deal with, but I stuck with it because that's friends are for.
"a active" should be "an active"
After the period after the word "songs", there should be a space before the beginning of the next sentence, and The word "she" there should be capitalized.
The same space thing appears after the word "writer" and I'm pretty sure "song writer" should be one word.
I was'nt a good friend to her, we were not good friends to each other. When she changed something ,like a movie,I got mad and tried to stop her. She would go and talk about me sometimes like when she got mad at me. We did not act like good friends.
The apostrophe in "was'nt" should be after the letter "n" and not the "s".
The comma in the first sentence should be a semicolon ( ; ).
In the second sentence, there are a few commas misplaced, such as the first one. You have the space on the wrong side of the comma, meaning the comma should come directly after the word "something" with the space after it.
The second comma in the sentence needs a space after it.
I could say about a million other mistakes (no offense, myeisha ) but I won't - and this is why: For one thing, you obviously didn't read the rules because 1) you didn't put the word "Rosie" in your author's comments like you were supposed to if you read the rules; and 2) it was supposed to be about losing a loved one to death... Either this has nothing to do with that, or it's not specified in the story.
I'm sorry; I have to disqualify this because it doesn't fit my criteria... If I missed something, please tell me, but I was sure this had nothing to do with a loved one dying. Also, if it was and I'm just stupid, then it should have said specifics and how it made you feel.
Lily
beginning: 4, language: 2, plot: 4, ending: 4, dialog: 1, characters: 3.
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Your story was great! I like to read about friendships and stuff like that. Stay golden!
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Awesome!
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this is very cute and very good. It is so true too! That is why I limit my friends.... Anyway, wonderful job and good luck, I hope you WIN!
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True stories can sometimes be the best sometimes. Good luck in finishing it. The only thing that you didn't do was put how old you are in the notes The best of luck in the contest
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Cool.
love it already!!
I love reading about this kinda stuff.
Can't wait for more
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