Pictures in the sand

He sits in the sand drawing pictures, things which remind him of home.  His back resting on the tank in the sand, he quietly wipes the tear off his cheek.
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Looking around before he stands, he scans the horizon for something askew.  Placing his hat back on he straightens up.  Walking slowly over to a tent, where his buddies are playing cards like nothing is wrong he sits beside them on a cot.
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"You playing’ Jones?"
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"Nah, Weezel, I send my money home" he says  and he touches the top of his hat, where his little boys picture stays always. 13

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  • StillReal
    October 14, 2004
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    awwwww! This is so sad. I can relate to this although I've never been away from home in a positive way I actually got incarcerated a few years back because a friend f mine framed me. I spent two and a half years in jail and when I got home my wife was pregnant with another mans child which I love as my own today even though recently we split and we are no longer together. We have an older girl which is mine, a middle girl which is someone elses and my baby boy. I love them all.

    StillReal

  • StrmDncr
    October 10, 2004
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    We sometimes forget the people who fight for us. We see only an army not the people. I keep flags in my window and they may stay there even when I decorate for the holidays.
    May they all come home soon... Safe and sound...

    Pat

  • SerenityNChains
    September 29, 2004
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    this touches me as my husband is in the U.S,Air Force and so are many dear friends in the armed forces.Several in Iraq now.I feel for the soldiers and all they give to defend their home and family.Thank you for writing this.The story is a bit hard to read, but its a great picture.I myself have it.Thanks again and blessed be

    ~~Serenity~~


  • Delphinidae
    September 29, 2004
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    WOW. Sometimes I read things that leave me speachless (which is hard to do cause I am a chatterbox). I also thought you captured the lonliness of this character very well, and the sort of everyday things a solider might do to pass the time... like 'his buddies are playing cards like nothing is wrong'. It amazes me how some people have the courage to live like this for the freedom and safty of others. So much for being speachless...


  • Kethry
    September 29, 2004
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    There are so many levels that make this good. You have encapsulated all the emnotions of being away from home and lonely in this. You give an underlying impression of soldiers on duty or some other such thing and you make it all seem so real and living. Good luck in the contest.

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