Liam And His Secret Love Part 6

Two days later everyone had arrived and the meeting was to take place early the next morning. Sara had been having a wonderful time walking around freely. She wrote poetry, walked the wooded paths, and visited the waterfall that she loved so much. She even went walking through the small shops and hovels around. That day she decided to go sit by the peaceful waterfall and think. She walked down the path and came to the water but someone was already there. A handsom elf sat on a rock that sat beside the calm waters. He had long blond hair that was braided at the sides. He seemed to be in deep thought so she sat on a flat stone away from where he perched. She didn't want to disturb him.1

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Liam didn't notice anyone was around until he came out of his thoughts. He turned slowly and looked around. He saw a lovely woman sitting on a rock a little ways away. To him she looked like an elven goddess. He stood and walked in her direction, trying not to desturb her. His mind was racing and so was his heart. What would he say to this lovely beauty when he reached her, he thought to himself feeling more nervouse than he had ever felt before.

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  • DarkOneShadow
    October 28, 2007

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    Ah, finally they meet! All of the earlier stories came up to this and it starts. Great work on bringing them together, though one note of reference... I was wondering if you wouldn't mind explaining more about Liam's character background. The previous chapters have been about Sara, but it would be nice to see Liam's backstory as well. Just a thought, but I won't distract you from your muses... they are the source of your inspiration about this series, let them guide your mind, heart and your pen...

    DarkOne