"You're a bad man, aren't you?"1
This statement shocked him. He stood there, looking at the girl he had stolen. Her pale porcelain skin was made more beautiful only by her gorgeous black dress, a single bright red rose printed on the front. Her words were spoken so shyly, as if she didn't truly want to say it.2
"Why would you think that?"3
"Because you took me from my mommy."4
They were walking through the woods. Through the blackness of the night, he could see her stunning green eyes, glimmering as bright as emeralds. He was captured by her beauty. All he wanted in life was to take care of her, make sure the shine in her eyes never went away.5
"I'm not a bad man. I promise. You will see your mommy again."6
"Why did you take me?"7
He could sense the fear in her voice. He looked down at her and saw a lonely tear roll down her face. He couldn't stand seeing her cry; it was breaking his heart. He tugged on the leather glove on his right hand, the hand he had burnt as a young child. He tugged on the glove whenever he fealt uneasy or nervous.8
"Do you know who I am? Did your mommy ever tell you about me?"9
"No."10
He didn't want to tell her, but she had a right to know. After all, this was her history. He didn't want her to grow up not knowing about her family.11
"I am your daddy."12
She stopped walking. She turned and looked at him, a look of uncertainty on her face. 13
"No you aren't. You're lying. My daddy is at home, with mommy."14
At that, she turned and ran. He sighed, knowing that she believed him. You shouldn't have told her, he thought. Now she'll never see her mommy again. He stood there for a moment, and then turned to run after her. Now that she knew, his job was done. He no longer needed her. She would be disposed of.15
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Comments
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whoa! What a twisted write! You should start writing scripts for movies, actually i dunno, do they make stuff that twisted
no really, i'd be your biggest fan !!!
Wow, that made my stomach hurt.
On a serious note:
People don't realize how much this could be reality.
My boyfriends cousin were stolen by their dad, and the cops did about ahit to help her get them back. He did end up in jail for something else and she got her kids back, BUT, they were different, and we think certain things happend... sad shit, but it is real, and your story might be a stroy, but .... ugh, this world is sick.
Peace out
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A bluntly sad story. It was simple but definetly put a message across. The ending was left pretty open; I liked that...
Did you mention the leather glove???...(Read the rules)
Good luck and thanks for entering x -
This is a great story. The imagery is so wonderful. I love it. I like that it is short but it's so complete. The ending is so sad. But open to. I wonder why would he dispose of his daughter after telling her? what purpose does that serve? Never the less wonderful write. Thanks for sharing and keep writting
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excellent
wow this story rocks my socks it kicks ass this is awesome omg i cant stop complementing it lol but wow this leaves me speechless...well u know what i mean but this is so good it's full of emotion and it has some type of a powerful meanin to it
~*cHeLsEa*~
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