My hands are tied
My feet are bound
My eyes are shut
And my lips are sealed1
My body is weak
I cannot move
Still, I will resist
I will not be stirred2
My time is short
My life will end
My fate is written
My living is my own3
I値l make my mark
I値l make it good
Life痴 all about inequity
I値l leave it like everybody4
I知 not giving up
I知 not going down
No one is on my side
I知 on my own5
I may not be free
I may not soar
I may be small
In this big world6
But I値l make my mark
I値l make it good
Life痴 all about inequity
But I値l leave it like everybody
Please tell me what you think
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The peom itself is really good. I like the idea to this it was a nice releaf. The only thing is their were a few points where the flow broke and the lines seamed ackword.
Stanza three
My time is short
My life will end
My fate is written
My living is my own3
Perhaps in the last sentence you mean my life is my own? living is a confusing tence to place there.
Stanza four
I’ll make my mark
I’ll make it good
Life’s all about inequity
I’ll leave it like everybody4
I'll leave it like everybody (seams abrupt like you need another word to compleate it.
Otherwise i loved this peom.
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Hey! Thanks for the comments. Well, I knew people would have problems with those two lines, I should've written the interpretations on the author notes.
"My living is my own" it means the "way of living" it was going to be too long if I wrote that. And the last line is done delibrately, as life itself ends abrubtly.
Thanks again! I really appreciate your views on the poem.
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