Twin Dragons

The summer sun shone down on me like a shining star. It's warmth brought me so much happiness. It was a perfect day, the grass was waving above me, around me, it was very peaceful. Every summer I would lay out in the fields which grew our crop of wheat each year. This year my Mother and Father decided to grow rye grass instead, it was more profiting than wheat. 1

I live in a small brick house that resides at the very edge of the village, out by the open plains. There's a really big willow tree out there that I go to visit often. I have many friends who like to go there too! My sisters and I attend the Hojinko Academy that is three miles from our village. In the summer we travel back and stay with our parents. In the winter months we go to school and study, we have our own small dorms which we reside in. 2

I am go to school to be a Blade Wielder, I carry a heavy sword and sometimes I can't spar because it's so heavy. I also carry with me two long swords, my teacher said that when I got stronger they would tell me their names. I guess that hasn't happened yet, because I don't know their true identities. 3

Mina is my best friend at school, she's learning to be a healer and a spear holder. She's a better healer than a fighter, but she can spar really well and never gives up. I wish sometimes that I had her determination. As a young woman it's really important for me to have good friends. Not ones who will warp my outlook on life. Mina is that someone, she helps me with all my hard classes and helps me get good grades. My parents can barely afford to send me here to school I had to be sponsored by my Master. He's the man who taught me all the basics before I went off to school. I began learning from him when I was ten and I'm now fifteen. I've learned a lot from him, he's a really odd person. He's was always late for my classes and always fell asleep when I was practicing with my swords. But he attended all my Completion Battles and cheered me on during them. My last one was really difficult. 4

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I went to Sahin to my last Completion Battle, if you defeat your opponent you move on to the next level. My last battle I had to use my real sword, I decided to use my twin Long swords because I'm better with them than the heavy sword.
My heavy sword is named Stone Head, because the blade is very wide and cannot be scarred nor broken. A samurai sword gifted with Blue ice from the Key Lakes couldn't break my sword. 6

In Sahin I fought my opponent who turned out to be a twin sword carrier too. Only he was much bigger than me and much more powerful. I used my Blade Fusion too many times and weakened myself. Blade Fusion can be very useful it's a technique only I can use. It is a battle move in which you reign close to your enemy and at the very last moment combine your twin blades together forming one single blade, but with double the power. I've conquered many enemies using it. This particular opponent was very resilient to my attacks. I suspected at first that he wore very well made armor, but then I realized he had the same level of protection as me. I decided there was something special about his twin swords. I lost the match and was badly wounded. It took me months to heal but when I was finally able to walk on my own he came back and told me all about why he was able to beat me. He told me he knew his swords names and that's what made him stronger. 7

After hearing that I decided I was going to work as hard as Possible to become stronger too and learn the names of my twin swords. I practiced every day probably more than my Master was comfortable with. He often told me to be careful, to rest and regain my strength before trying to accomplish another battle technique. Truthfully, I didn't listen I wanted to prove to my swords that I was worthy of knowing their names. 8

Almost a full year passed and the time for my last Completion Battle was coming up. I still didn't know my swords names and I was beginning to get frustrated. It was on the final eve that I conquered the Heavenly Hammer, that my swords revealed their names. I went and told my master and he warned me to practice calling them out before the battle. I did so and was amazed at how much more powerful they were when fully summoned. 9

Tsyoshi, was the name of my Blade of Power. Hiromasa, was the name of my Blade Of Eternity. I realized that these two blades were much more powerful than my Heavy Sword, Stone Head. I was fully confident of winning my next battle. When the time came to finally battle my opponent I was ready. Yet again my opponent was stronger, bigger and seemed much more knowledgable than I. Until he tasted the silver on my blades. During the heat of the battle I called out their names and their blades turned color. Tsyoshi turned bright gold, Hiromasa turned white. I put my heart and soul into the battle, and in the end I conquered my opponent. I wounded him badly and I felt terrible but it was all apart of the battle. My Master would have been very dissappointed if I had treated the opponent like a sparring match. This had been far more serious. 10

After that match I was sent to the Academy, nothing was going to stop me there. I went to the school for a year and here I am now sitting my parents Wheat field. Soon though I will have to return to my Masters home for training I am expecting to learn many new techniques. Tsyoshi and Hiromasa are here with me always. And they together complete me and give me the ultimate power. 11

I went to stay with my Master for two months. In that time I learned many moves that would help me in school. Somethiing dreadful happened the last month of summer. Before I was scheduled for my class my Master came to me and told me I wasn't going back to the Academy. I was staying with him and going into hiding. I asked why we must hide and he told me, there was a war going on and they were pulling strong fighters from the Academy's to compensate for their losses in the armies. My master didn't want me to be another Young warrior lost on the battlefield. As a young woman I was more shy about going into a full on battle. I had never battled so many people before and didn't want to either. So, I ran away with my Master. We ran very far high into the mountains. By the time we'd left the war had already spread all over our homeland. We ended up fighting enemy soldiers just to get past them and into the next country. When we reached the border we were depserate, both severely wounded and tired. Master took me to his friends home which he hoped would still be there. Luckily for us he was still living in his old house. 12

I wasn't as strong as my Master was he could carry on with even the most severe wounds. On top of his strength he was a very talented Healer. I think it pained him that I, his best and only student did not have the skill for healing. I blacked out when we arrived and was unconscious for most of our stay. I don't know what transpired while I was asleep but it couldn't have been good. When I woke up to the severe pain of my injuries my Master had a very serious look on his face, one I had never seen before. He told me my parents had been killed when the enemy soldiers attacked our town. Anger boiled inside me and I demanded that he bandage my wounds tightly and thickly. I was going to avenge my parents. Master forbade me to go but I insisted that it was my right and duty to avenge their deaths. I think he took the situation too seriously because he hit me right over my head with the hilt of his sword. 13

When I woke again he warned me he was willing to knock me out as many times as needed. I agreed to remain at the house and heal. I was glad for his love and patience, it made me happy to know he wasn't willing to let me go to my death. But even so, that anger still burned inside me. I constantly thought about the people in my town. How many of them could have been saved if I had been defending them? How many children would still be laughing, smiling or playing outside? These were burdens which left deep scars on my heart. I became holed up in my grief. My Master told me that grieving was natural and that I shouldn't fight it, but I did. 14

I spent the whole two years of the war training fiercely. My hands bled from the hilt of my sword wrenching against my targets. My body ached from the hours spent practicing my stronger techniques. I sickened myself into a wallowing illness. And the grief and guilt burdened me so much that it kept my body from being healthy. I could barely pick up my swords sometimes and when I tried it hurt my body so that my Master would have to come and help me back to my bed. I had done it to myself, the guilt was not mine. It had not been my fault that the people, my parents had died in the war. It was fate, a fate that I despised, hated even wanted to rid myself of. 15

My Master did everything he could to undo me from the overwhelming emotions I felt. He felt sad that he could not free me, so many times he told me the very same thing. I never took it to heart until one day, I began to feel the urge to swing my swords. But unlike before where I would swing my swords at targets to rid myself of anger, this would be entirely different because this time, I wanted to swing my swords for me. It happened when my swords gleamed at me. I watched them as they began to quake and clang. They suddenly fell over sideways and landed on the floor. I slowly made my way over to them and picked them up. I called Hiromasa out and a feeling of relief washed over me. I don't know how or why it happened but slowly I began to realize my purpose and why I had been blessed with such powerful swords. 16

With the help of my master I got myself back into full health and began training again only this time because I wanted to, not to punish myself. As I had done in the beginning. I was now a powerful warrior, a strong Blade Master. And I was going to defeat my enemy. But not because I was angry at them, but because it was the just thing to do. Before I had only been thinking of myself, now I was thinking of others. 17

My Master and I went around defeating the enemy soldiers until the war was over. We were not connected to the army, but at the same time we were fighting for the same cause. We became heroes of my homeland and my swords became legend. They were known as the Twin Dragons, because when I went on that battlefield the first technique I used was Dragon Armada. And this move swiped out hundreds of soldiers at a time. Someday soon, the Twin Dragons will rise again. But only when we're needed.
Until then we remain just and wait for the opportune moment.

Author notes

For Contest By SO STRANGE- Avril Lavinge
I chose option 3 to write from- This story I entered is very new. I only submitted it in maybe two or three days ago.
I hope you enjoy. Let me know what needs work. : )


Okay! I hope this is what you wanted for this contest. lol. I tried my hardest and I think it came out pretty good. I'll make changes slowly but I don't think there are too many errors. Let me know what you think and please, don't hesitate to say when something is boring. If there's a part in the story that's just "BLAH" let me know. : )

ENJOY!

Oh yeah, it's a story about a young girl and apart of her journey she takes learning to wield her two Twin Swords. Tsyoshi and Hiromasa.

Tsyoshi means STRONG
And Hiromasa means WISE

Tsyoshi is the Blade Of Power
Hiromasa is the Blade Of Eternity

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  • abba12
    November 9, 2007

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    I think it could really be extended upon, it seems very rushed and run through, like a recount. Also, you begun at her lying in the middle of the field, and then you told what happened in the past, and then what happened in the future, so the chronology is kind of... odd, I'm having trouble telling when this story is actually being told from. But the theory is really good, there's a great idea and you've put a lot of thought into this. Add some description, flesh it out a bit. My only other comment would be, you should look at your comma usage, there is a lot of places you just keep typing where there could be commas and such to make it flow better. But all around, good concept, thanks for entering