He looked out the window as he pulled away1
His phone began ringing he didn't know quite what to say2
Remembering now all of those days3
The flowers he sent4
The look on her face5
Wherever they went6
Her eyes shining brightly7
The last thing he saw8
As he turned to his car9
He did not have far to go10
He can not believe it11
But the tears running down12
Make him believe it13
Pulling now into his driveway14
His phone quit ringing15
On this cold and dark day16
He goes through the motions for his mom17
Everything is ok Nothing is wrong18
But his mind keeps on racing19
Back to the girl20
Who not so long ago21
Was his entire world22
As he pulls away she turns from the street23
Just so she can say he didn't see her weep24
She opens the door as he turns the corner25
Nothing he said could have ever warned her26
She looks to her dad as asks her whats wrong27
She falls in his arms cries hard and long28
He was the guy that she was going to marry29
His face his voice his smell30
Now she's going through hell31
She lies on her bed thinking about him32
And wondering if she'd be better off dead33
He goes to his room falls on his bed34
Laying there and wondering what he just did35
He thought that he had wanted this wanted to be free36
But now he realizes she was his everything37
He sits up now and grabs his phone38
He dialed her number oh he should have known39
Better then to do the thing that he had done40
How could he have possibly been so dumb41
Her phone loudly ringing42
The last thing she heard43
As the blood poured from her wrist44
Her vision becoming blurred45
Lying on the floor46
Where she was found47
A note next to her head48
Written with many words49
I know how stupid that this sounds50
But I loved you more51
Then anything in the world52
And without you here in my life53
Why should I go on54
Asking myself every day55
Where did I go wrong56
I just wanted you to know57
that when I used the knife58
You were on my mind59
And we were together for so long60
But now I am gone61
Authors Notes!62
I hope this qualifies as a poem for you..its a song i wrote today..and i thought it was pretty good...anyways...oh ya..PANCAKES RULE!
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Comments
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Thats sad.
Awesome lyrics. Lyrics are poems too, for the record. They just have melody to them. That was really good thouhgh. Random authors note. ^.^ I like pancakes 2! ^.^
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i thought it was super cute... until she comitted suicide. (yes, i'm sorry, but i am anti-suicide/cutting) i think it would actually be publishable if she didn't kill herself! i really like the rhyming and the whole concept (ixnay the kill) but nice write! i liked it.
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O.M.G. it rocks. sorrowwintears is my friend. No wonder he loved it!!
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That is a really nice song.
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i absolutly love this song
i wirte songs all the time and we have a band so yeah. it also describes me and my ex. i love it -
I forgive you! this is really good! you have a great talent for this! Good luck in the contest!
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Evalyn is Mew Zokuro. She has purple hair, and kitty ears!..i know its not the authors notes..buuuut i hope youll forgive me
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o.o
-eyetwitch-
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That was...I want to say cute, but then the twist stabbed into it - no pun intended - and now i'm just eyetwitchy, but in a good way o.o
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You know how long it's been since I've had pancakes? At least 4 months or so.
Unrequited or forbidden love is quite the difficult thing to get through, I hear ya. I didn't even have to cut myself to relate to you on that.
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